Open Poetry #25 |
I Did The Best I Could |
Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
I Did The Best I Could By: Noah Eaton 3/30/03 Twiddling your thumbs, murmuring aimlessly Like the pendulum on a clock, your minds oscillating For so long I stayed up all night Making sure you had company I seem to identify with all your scars Hugged you as you were perspiring The blue eye shadow above your eyelids You used to hide your bruises nervously Heavy-handed, inside-out Prostrated to the point you could never walk around Your heart is proselytized And deep inside faith is something you can’t decide Just another roulade of roundelay I was always awake through the night Sat on the couch and listened to the radio And fell asleep the time I saw daylight I couldn’t leave you alone Just wanted to make you feel at home… I tried to read you like an open book Being broken and misunderstood I did the best I could I stood by your side Hated to hear you cry I did the best I could… 2 A.M, with your eyes pale and bright Like a pagan praying at the shrine You just needed an angel To carry you while your intentions went blind Just one more prayer Another tourniquet Thinking about the circumstances Trying to push you back from those regrets I couldn’t leave you alone Just wanted to make you feel at home… I tried to read you like an open book Being broken and misunderstood I did the best I could I stood by your side Hated to hear you cry I did the best I could I kept the night light on And sung a fragile song I did the best I could I tried to set you free Eventually you will see I did the best I could... When you're alone... ......Do you ever feel at home? I tried to read you like an open book Being broken and misunderstood I did the best I could I stood by your side Hated to hear you cry I did the best I could I kept the night light on And sung a fragile song I did the best I could I tried to set you free Eventually you will see I did the best I could... I did the best I could... I did what I should I did all I could... "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-31-2003 10:53 AM).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
I definitely believe you did your best... sad though... the flow to this one is great... regards, sudhir |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Noah, you are so sweet. I know that you did your best, too. Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
...as long as you did your best, none could have done any better :-) Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
so much heartfelt emotion here |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh sweet Noah..I know whatever the situation.. you always strive to do your best. This piece just aches sidekick. Hope you are okay....Hugs, Nancy ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Noah, Awww, this makes my heart ache for you dear poet. I am sure that you did your best too. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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SilentFreija Junior Member
since 2003-03-30
Posts 37 |
I like the title! I LOVED THE POEM! I LOVE UR WRITING STYLE! Keep it up! The poem kept me interested the whole way through. Where you look for broken hearts...you'll find me... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Noah, geez... |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Of course you did your best....it's written all over your apparent nature!!!! This one builds in intensity!!!! So very sad Noah!!!!! HUGS, Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a nice one Noah...I guess another cliche is "you did the best you could..." hugss M (by the way I really like the smaller pictures, it lets you words stand out above it all.) |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Noah, Wonderful poem. Reads so well. I like: "Like a pagan praying at the shrine You just needed an angel to carry you...................." And, "I did what I should I did all I could" You always will Noah, loving friend that you are....you'll be there for her and any other you might help. Lovely poem, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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texasrose Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 146 |
Noah, all that we can ever do is our best. I enjoyed this write although so sad. |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
Awwwww this is touching your a true friend and thier lucky 2 have u If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come? |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A nice expression of your feelings...James |
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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas |
Hi Noah! I see in my absence you haven't lost your inspiration. This is truly wonderful! Kris Hey dog, did you see the size of that chicken!? |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Noah I felt so much sadness and strong emotion throughout your words. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssssss) Thank you everyone for your very caring responses, I wrote this after hearing from my cousin in months, who is feeling more depressed lately and was raped when she was ten, and for years I have tried to comfort her to the best of my ability but know I will never understand all the pain in her and that is a heartbreaking fact to me! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
I believe that all good people, and you are certainly one, does exactly that. We do the best we can, the best we know at that moment. Good write!! Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Noah...Enjoyed very much. That's all any of us can do. This flows like a song.Thanks for sharing...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" [This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (03-31-2003 10:36 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - you are indeed an angel my friend. One of the most kindest I've ever had the pleasure of meeting... BC |
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