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Soleil Noir
Senior Member

since 2001-12-19

Posts 688
USA

0 posted 2003-02-18 03:22 PM

I know why
I can't write
my own anger...
nor pound the beach

for fear the find
of words written in sand
by those it should not hurt,

what cure, these repercussions -

certainly they would go
deeper
longer, faster, harder
than any threat
of annihilation...

(I cannot write anger...
because it would be
a waste of good paper,
keystrokes,
thought process,
the mark of selfish...)

so I shall be a shellfish...
I shall make pearls
from the irritation of
the grain of truth[s]
for there are many,

and I shall
scuttle along the bottom,
brine shall hide the tears,
my shell, a bit of protection...

some day, hands
will scoop me up, rid me
of my treasure, rinse
my brine,
and for a brief moment,
I shall be adored,
then swallowed,
giving one lover
in love with me,
a pleasure
of this moment...

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

1 posted 2003-02-18 03:32 PM

Beautifuly expressed.
Eric

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-02-18 03:39 PM

"some day, hands
will scoop me up, rid me
of my treasure, rinse
my brine,
and for a brief moment,
I shall be adored,
then swallowed,
giving one lover
in love with me,
a pleasure
of this moment..."
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Love this...sure do!!

~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2003-02-18 06:40 PM

yes... very well written..and the ending.. perfect..

Robert Frazier
Senior Member

since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

4 posted 2003-02-18 06:53 PM

as true as the waves rush to the shore!

Rf

Quiet Acquiescence
Member

since 2003-02-16

Posts 70
somewhere out here

5 posted 2003-02-18 06:59 PM

It's soooo beautiful! *sniffle*

*sniffle*
"and I shall
scuttle along the bottom,
brine shall hide the tears,
my shell, a bit of protection..."

I love that part.

~*~Courage is wings~*~

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

6 posted 2003-02-18 09:10 PM

Wow! I enjoyed this greatly. Especially as I continued to read it got better and better. Loved the ending, too, same as others mentioned.

Very unique!

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

7 posted 2003-02-19 01:12 AM

Beautifully written,and it gave me alot to think about.My writing seems to specialize in anger and irony.hmmmmm........I am saving this one,nice write
thank you
Jason

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2003-02-19 01:43 AM

what an ending! Love this piece! very insightful!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

9 posted 2003-02-19 08:30 AM

I know why
I can't write
my own anger...
nor pound the beach

for fear the find
of words written in sand
by those it should not hurt,

==================================

will ya look at that...I just found a poetic pearl.

LOVE the analogy and metaphor here SN...
very clever poetess Noir.

" ... And think not, that you can direct the course of love ...
if it finds you worthy ... it then directs your course."

K.Gibran

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (02-19-2003 08:31 AM).]

garysgirl