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littlewing
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0 posted 2003-03-29 11:31 PM



Conversion
diversion

tinkling link drink . . . SMASH

breaking glass
diamonds scattered
in the grass
Scurry
hurry
Grab your prize
Rise

psycho losing lightning crazy

Napping
rapping
Someone is tip-tapping
The raven?
Go away, please
I've no time to play
not today

Eyes darting
behind your back
Who said that?

. . .waking up with lipstick traces
crazy scattered lines pictures
useless music smiling laughing
pretending to be swimming
sacred silence scarred within
the realms of this reality lies insanity . . .


Neck muscles taut
spinning like a top
Nobody there, my dear
I fear

the voices
these noises
not of me
I want to be free
from this cage
rage
A captor
with key

It is me . . .

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1 posted 2003-03-29 11:34 PM


Sue, Maybe it's just that I really am that thick, however it took me 4 tries at this to even begin to understand what you were trying to say... then it hit me... WHO FRIGGIN' CARES??????
The words themself actually kept me reading after the first time, and I enjoyed it more each time. This is really a first rate job.

Imagine all the People living life in peace...
John Lennon

littlewing
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2 posted 2003-03-29 11:36 PM


LMFAOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO BRAD!!!!!!
You posted before I was able to say that this is what happens after you listen to System of a Down while reading Poe - I am really not crazy - hehehehehe . . . .  

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3 posted 2003-03-29 11:39 PM





I liked it very much. And Brad is right-even if we don't understand a poem we can enjoy it. I do see the 'disorder' in this one.

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4 posted 2003-03-29 11:41 PM


System of a Down, and Poe. You need say nothing more. I won't even try to understand, but thoroughly enjoyed the read.
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5 posted 2003-03-29 11:45 PM


Listening to SOAD while reading Poe????? And you say you're NOT crazy???
lol

Imagine all the People living life in peace...
John Lennon

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6 posted 2003-03-29 11:47 PM


Ok if I must explain - please go read about schizophrenia in the DSM - IV - (a manual for psychiatric disorders) I thought it was clear that in these lines someone was having a nervous breakdown - is realllly not about myself - I swear . . . .  

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7 posted 2003-03-29 11:48 PM


Yep! yer nuts. Liking the dijointedness of your disorder though
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8 posted 2003-03-30 12:09 PM


Actually, Sue, I have a copy of the DSM-IV on my desk, and have a friend that is supposed to be getting me the new DSM-V when it finally comes out. As I said before, I really must be that thick... however, now that you explained it, It all makes perfect sense... Thanks for clearing it up.

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mmmm cocoa puffs
littlewing
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10 posted 2003-03-30 01:36 AM


Brad - you made me laugh so hard up there - am still laughing and no - you are not thick - I am crazy obviously - no seriously - that was pretty strange in itself to just come upon - hey you know the DSM - very cool - but no - NOT THICK - far from it - is my crazy writing . . .  Hey when you get that new copy - make sure I am not in there k?
but you liked it and thats what matters - thank you

Poet - TY - hehehe disorder lol understatement . . .

Rose lol - smart . . . back away quietly . . .  

Ed - gee thanks - and all this without a MD approval - mannnn . . .  TY

Raph sweety - oops I meant - (a certain puppety dog friend of ours) - lmao - thats coo koo puffs - and you didnt even have to read this now did you to know that?  No - of course you didnt . . . (made me laugh so hard when I saw just that - mmmm cocoa puffs - still laughing . . . xxoo

Thank you guys for reading my . . .  slip . . . oops  heheheh  . . . and White Stripes too fueled this one xxoo
  



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11 posted 2003-03-30 04:15 AM


love the whole thread!
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12 posted 2003-03-30 04:47 AM


Phbllllllllltttttttttt..nite nite coco
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13 posted 2003-03-30 05:10 AM


It is only because I lost my mind long ago, that I understand, nice write, fellow crazy one."and because they are gone, they are one"
Jason

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14 posted 2003-03-30 06:49 AM


Dixie - hahahaha thank you - still smiling


Raph - so its Coco huh? mannnn . . . . stop spitting at me and geez I am the crazy one -go figure . . .

Jason - hehehe someone understands this - now I am scared . . .  TY

Thanks guys xxoo  

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15 posted 2003-03-30 04:55 PM


Sue....I am saying this in the most loving manner I can...

YOU ARE NUTS WOMAN! lol

Ringo:  you are Thick, but it's nice of Sue to console you that you aren't... LOL

I agree with Dixie...I like this whole thread....but I do need to go space out for a few now that I've tried to make sense of that poem LOLOL

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

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16 posted 2003-03-30 07:34 PM




eating seeds again?    yea, system and poe,
thats overkill for one day..

pshyco crazy, psycho crazy,
yea, i t was written for me too

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17 posted 2003-03-31 12:54 PM


ROTFL, you just posted an SOS, that's all...
that combo you listened to?
migraine material

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18 posted 2003-03-31 01:48 AM



Neck muscles taut
spinning like a top
Nobody there, my dear
I fear

That pretty much sums it up...
wouldn't you love to spend a weekend
at some swanky spa just to loosen up a bit!!

Or just flutter in a bird bath for an entire day!  

Neat poem little birdie~

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19 posted 2003-03-31 02:01 AM


um...

I understood it immediately...

should I be frightened?



hugs Sue.

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20 posted 2003-03-31 02:16 AM


um...

I understood it immediately...

should I be frightened?



hugs Sue.

littlewing
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21 posted 2003-03-31 05:54 AM



Kristie - sshhhhhh - dont telll . . .

Michele - hehehe - you know that tune - eating seeds - ummm no - but found something strange growing in my yard . . .

Kacy - lmao - an SOS - hehehe - hey - this music takes AWAY my migraine - I think I need Ritalin . . .

Blues - yesssssss my neck is killing me!  Cant go in the birdbath it is like 20 degrees here - freeze my wingies off . . .

K - now I knew you would understand this one - lmao - be afraid - very afraid . . .

Thanks guys xxoo    

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22 posted 2003-03-31 06:30 AM




regards,
sudhir

littlewing
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23 posted 2003-03-31 04:33 PM


Thank you Sudhir for reading my ramble lol
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