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Longing For Ones True Love
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Longing For Ones True Love |
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Aya Junior Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 42New Zealand |
I know I wasn’t the first one You had love in your past before me I wanted you ever so close My heart is locked yet you have the key Please unlock my heart you see before you Please allow me your love I have always wanted you from across the way Forever in my heart I want you to stay I know that its hard on you to look at me The way I look at you I know that you might never love me As much as my love for you is true. There is burning desire deep within me I am yearning for you love that doesn’t seem to be there I am never afraid to look to you for hope I’m just wanting you be close to me, here I’m dreaming of the day you tell me That I’m girl for you I’m wanting you to hold me near Saying that your love for me is true I cant believe its so hard on me Watching myself ignore my one true love I just want to show you how much I care for you But your with another girl which is making me so blue As day fades to night, and night turns back into day I feel that today’s the day that you will tell me what you want to say That you love me with all your heart and soul And that forever together we will be one day. [This message has been edited by Aya (03-29-2003 05:49 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah, young love...I remember it...good write, thanks for reminding me what it's about. just one thing I noticed...it is sort of distracting to read slang, like "b4", in such a good write...in my opinion, it would read smoother if you wrote out "before". |
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Aya Junior Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 42New Zealand |
Thanks, i will edit it, i did it in a rush and forgot to edit it properly. So thanks once again, i will edit it now. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
I enjoyed the read of this. It's very nicely done. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You expressed your feelings very well in this lovely poem of longing...  Love & Light, Earth Angel |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Alicia - this is lovely - I FELT this - i know this too well - nice job xxoo |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Alicia, this is really pretty. Hugs, Ethel/garysgirl |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
Aya, I love this it is so good  Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Your with another girl." I hope you're patient...James |
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Etain Member
since 2003-02-22
Posts 92The moon... |
Beautiful!! Love, Etain. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
welcome to passions  look forward to read more |
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Aya Junior Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 42New Zealand |
I thought this poem disapered off the face of this site and it apperes again, who would of thought :P Anyway guys, thanks. |
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