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Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-03-29 12:33 PM

I strayed too far
and felt the pull of chain
the rattle of thoughts
that keep me bound
submissive
in cell of self
to whim of shadow
dungeon surrendered to
willingly in search of..
I forget now...
These walls
swallow spirit whole
stretching hands
in reach through window
for a feel of sun
as far as chains allow

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

1 posted 2003-03-29 12:43 PM

in search of self...in search of liberated selves...interesting imagery

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

2 posted 2003-03-29 12:57 PM

Those chains that bind and hold us captive.

Goodness Raph, the pain that aches!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

3 posted 2003-03-29 01:04 AM

Ralph, this one really hurts, too.
I don't know what to say.

Heart Hugs to you,
Ethel

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

4 posted 2003-03-29 01:11 AM

thank you ecrivan

Blues can i write anything but pain? lol

Ethel your reads are enough, and one thing? Raphael,Raf Raph but please never Ralph, common mistake but it isn't a short form of Raphael

Laoha
Member

since 2003-03-07

Posts 161
Nevada, USA

5 posted 2003-03-29 02:42 AM

The imagination is so powerful, but
Sometime dangerous if not careful.
Freedom, not everybody know,
It's like a soul.

Love this piece and will work on the translation.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

6 posted 2003-03-29 03:32 AM

Hey Raph - this is amazing - as always but you know . . . you are working on breaking those chains to set you free . . . good luck my friend xxoo

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

7 posted 2003-03-29 05:39 AM

I understand this and feel it deep

Gina Culliney
Member

since 2003-03-08

Posts 170

8 posted 2003-03-29 04:22 PM

Dark. Intense. Packed full of raw emotion coined down by your pen. Most writer's need pages to turn out that much emotion which you condense into your writings so well.

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

9 posted 2003-03-29 04:34 PM

..."the cell of self" is made up of the most limiting chains that bind...

I enjoy the fruits of your creative genious!

Peace, Love & Light,
EA

Alicethruglass
Member

since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

10 posted 2003-03-29 06:04 PM

doesn't the sunshine make all the difference...

sometimes I feel as if I am in a dungeon
(self-imposed though)

~A~

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

11 posted 2003-03-29 06:59 PM

Thank you Laoha,yes it's dangerous to go delving to deep into shadow

Sue working yes..succeeding who knows

Dixie I'm sorry that you do, lovely existance isn't it

Thank you very much Gina, I appreciate it, it's something i've worked on my earliy work felt too wordy

Thank you Linda always appreciate your comments

A i like to delude myself into thinking mine are not self imposed but I'm smart enough to know the final say has always been mine despite what others may do

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

12 posted 2003-03-29 07:09 PM

Another awesome write Raph, Powerful. So you don't like Ralph eh?

Jason

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

13 posted 2003-03-29 07:16 PM

Sad but true. Freedom is not free- in any sense. Your poem brought harsh reality, which is what I look for in a good poem.

Poetry does not know age,
poetry knows skill and compassion

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

14 posted 2003-03-29 10:44 PM

Jason not particularly, people assume that's my name but Ralph is the english version of Rolf where as Raphael is its own name..so there..lol

Thanks Wind you know that's me harsh reality

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

15 posted 2003-03-29 11:01 PM

"These walls
swallow spirit whole
stretching hands
in reach through window
for a feel of sun
as far as chains allow"
________________

GAWD, if only you knew how this speaks to me...I'm actually speechless for once...and that's a very good thing

I'm keeping this.

Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

16 posted 2003-03-30 01:08 AM

Thanks Melissa appreciate it! lol

Jason Lyle
Senior Member

since 2003-02-07

Posts 1438
With my darkling

17 posted 2003-03-30 03:51 AM

http://www.marshallmint.com/angels/raphael.html

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

18 posted 2003-03-30 04:33 AM

Thank you Jason always appreciate when you stop in, and this, I've studied the root of it before and serenity likes to remind me of my namesake, but can one heal themself is the question?

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

19 posted 2003-03-30 06:33 AM

yes

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

20 posted 2003-03-30 09:12 AM

I forget now...
These walls
swallow spirit whole
stretching hands
in reach through window''

~~~~~~
haunting....
L~

I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light
You come to me out of my dreams
Across the night

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

21 posted 2003-03-30 10:14 PM

Hope so Sue hope so

Lauren, Haunted...grin

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

22 posted 2003-03-31 09:15 AM

i have missed you

enjoying catching up on all yer stuff i've missed raph. me computers broke u see, so i'm in a library, on a very uncomfortable chair,but hope to be back into the swing of things soon.
its good to see nothings changed, yer still gr8.
love, gemma x

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

23 posted 2003-03-31 09:40 AM

Get back as soon as possible you and your words are sorely missed

Laoha
Member

since 2003-03-07

Posts 161
Nevada, USA

24 posted 2003-04-02 09:57 AM

Here it goes, sorry it took so long. http://www.chinapoet.net/cgi-bin/topic.cgi?forum=35&topic=241&show=0

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

25 posted 2003-04-02 07:25 PM

enjoyed

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