Open Poetry #25 |
Last Tick of the Clock |
Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
The last tick of the clock sounds louder in this room Once painted bright yellow now it’s rusted with secret gloom Once filled with laughter’s gaiety now echoed steps sound in the hall Once held up with love and care it seems about to fall Door closed one last time the home we knew is past As I drive away today I’ll cry for you at last |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
This aches, hopes everythings alright |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Damn Sharon! This is so ruefully hollow..... It fairly echoes. Nicely done poet sir (hehe) |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Indeed, it aches so very softly. A wonderful, yet hauntingly sad write. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
An all too familiar echo~ Best to let the tears flow on their own and wring them out. so sad this is~ |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sharon, this one hurts, but it's written very beautifully. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I surely understand this piece... The thing about time, of course, is that there's a new door to open next... Nicely done, PdV... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you for your kind words. |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
I know just how you feel (I think) We moved just recently and I miss it... I miss every place I have ever lived.... the empty spaces are filled with memories..... Guess you will just have to take them with you. And, yes, I hope you are doing OK. Sherry Cherish the good memories of the past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. But above all... be kind to yourself today. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Sharon - I know that Tick Tock all too well - miss it myself - I do - share your feeling this evening - this one hit home xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
geez, this got me good |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
it takes strength. I felt this one, only I am not the one leaving. hugs M |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
very haunting write, one I relate too well....heart hugssss.... I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetDeVine~ Oh ... how I know this feeling~ My 'swamp' still calls me home~ *huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
what a great way to say it... much enjoyed ... it is sad to leave, but then away from one might just be closer to another ... destination regards, sudhir |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
you'll always have your memories :-) Good job... Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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