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A Tale |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
A Tale An old woman wishes to tell her tale She looks at me and smiles Wrinkles around her eyes lips parched and dry give me pause I place a straw between her lips the liquid clearly providing relief and temporary pleasure She has longed strayed from youth My energy is soaring with little time to listen Too urgent is the call for my own time to experience Youth is a fleeting moment As I await my time to come We push back as far as we can We drag our moments unwilling to let go It works for a time until we forget Then, without knowing we lose track The clock awakens, it chimes in years The mirror becomes an unfamiliar picture framing the resemblance of a long ago relative Suddenly, I feel her shaking hand A desert full of wrinkled sand touches me The flesh around her fingers thin as tissue The veins pronounced as I hold her steady Cool to the touch is she I wrap her hand in mine Giving her as much warmth as I can I dare not look into her eyes for she might see the moisture in mine I concentrate on her frail hands She tells me of her youth, her travels, her husband Talk of the future becomes less important Labored moments now are her life and I listen and I move closer and I cry |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Electra, I cried reading this the first time and did so this time too, our elderly should never be left alone as they deserve our most loving attention as love and compassion is what makes them feel comfortbale and youthful in their hearts and so they can have a shoulder to cry over too! (big hugggssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, you truly have an angelic heart, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Electra, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful write! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Thank you Noah, Your compassion always comes through in your poetry. Thank you for your acknowledgement. SimplyGold |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Thank you Enchantress, It's good to be back! I wish I could stay here all the time. SG [This message has been edited by SimplyGold (03-14-2003 07:47 PM).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
a well told tale. Joyce |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes...I know I voted before, but I do want this most compassionate piece in the book, so here I am again! |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
A splndid write!  |
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SPIRIT Senior Member
since 2002-12-29
Posts 1745California Desert |
Lovely and touching gets my vote. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
SimplyGold - a touching write, my vote is in... BC |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Thank you all so much for recasting your votes.  SG |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
there is so much to learn from those older and wiser than we... I use to love to listen to my Grandfather talk about arriving in America when he was 12. ~A~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Great write!  All writing comes |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Suddenly, I feel her shaking hand A desert full of wrinkled sand touches me The flesh around her fingers thin as tissue The veins pronounced as I hold her steady Cool to the touch is she I wrap her hand in mine Giving her as much warmth as I can ================================ this is exceptional and very touching. very well done SG. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Very Good!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Alicethruglass, I think you should write about your being 12 and listening to your granddad. What a splendid write it would be. Thank you for your response. SG |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Janet Marie, Thank you so much for the response. Appreicate it very, very much. SG |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Lone Wolf, Thanks for stopping to read my poem and for your wonderful feedback! SG |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Bridgette, Thank you so much! SG |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
I enjoyed this poem very much, sometimes people take for granted the knowledge that can be learned from our elders. I know I love to listen to the tales older people have to tell, and it makes them so happy to share it.  Sometimes we have to follow a stronger voice, even if it's silent. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Enjoyed the read, thank you for sharing Charisma |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Your poem is simply gold. It touches me on a personal level. Excellent! *s When you think you have heard it all, |
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