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Ozark Mountain Dew
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Just before sunrise The old truck was climbing Twisted roads north of Ft Smith And she was sleeping Head against the window a jacket she had shoved In her backpack Rolled up for a pillow. Just outside of Acorn On Hwy 260 she stirred Wiped her yes and peered At the horizon gauging how much time Between now and the shots she Already had composed in her mind. “Take that road” she said and pointed left to a dirt track leading up a hardscrabble hill. We got about as far as the road was meant to go When she said, “stop here.” “Come with me” she ordered. We walked up the hill a ways racing the rise of sun Until she was satisfied. Below us was a valley. Green spring grass holding to the steep hills Seemed to be dull, until the sun in it’s rise Transformed the valley into an expanse Of green diamonds “I told you I would show you the dew.” She said with a smile. “Now, I’m hungry. Find me someplace to eat.” She said turning her back and walking to the truck. I waited a while, Watching the sunlight on grassy hills Turn from the glitter of diamonds To lush Emerald richness. “Pancakes?” I asked. “They’ll do.” She replied. “I want to get to the Quachita Mountains By this afternoon.” I drove, She cleaned lenses And talked. Later, Tripod and camera became her obsession As sunlight mixed with clouds Painting vistas below us with Patchwork shadows That lumbered in slow steps Across the afternoon. ……………………………………………… Along the verdant valley far below the ridge Along the winding highway, lies old Bowly’s bridge We used to go there swimming in the summers sun Had me one or two there when we were both too young Can you meet me there at midnight on warm summer eve Were the words promises or are they things we now must grieve You told me that you’d love me and we would find a way To make old Bowly’s our private place to play We can watch the sunrise and hear the cardinal sing Drink some campfire coffee and not think of anything Later we’ll go walking down along the banks Lose ourselves in cedar that grow in crowded ranks We’ll find the hidden hollow soft with cool green grass Rest a while in shadows as we stare at Ringman’s pass When our hearts have rested and the world has ceased its shove We’ll find ourselves in sleeping bags wrapped in our sweet love Can you whisper to me those three words we once thought were ours Can you mean them now as you once did or has the meaning soured I still travel down to Bowley’s bridge in hopes you will show Knowing in my heart and soul if you do our true love would grow Along the verdant valley far below the ridge Along the winding highway, lies old Bowly’s bridge We used to go there swimming in the summers sun Had me one or two there when we were both too young [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (02-18-2003 12:38 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Below us was a valley. Green spring grass holding to the steep hills Seemed to be dull, until the sun in it’s rise Transformed the valley into an expanse Of green diamonds “I told you I would show you the dew.” She said with a smile. ~*~ You brought a lot to mind, mister... a lot... now where are my Kleenex? |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Can't say this one makes me cry (yet) but what I like so very much is the transformation of the green spring grass turning to green diamonds from the effects of sun and dew....just sparkling!!! I like "hardscrabble hill" and "patchwork shadows", each two word descriptions which show so much.... About to get my map out to find Bowley's Bridge....smiling here.... me and most of the women here, I suspect! You'll end up with a PIP line-up....  enjoying this series.... Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Enjoying the ride ever so much, Captain! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Below us was a valley. Green spring grass holding to the steep hills Seemed to be dull, until the sun in it’s rise Transformed the valley into an expanse Of green diamonds “I told you I would show you the dew.” She said with a smile. =============================== I waited a while, Watching the sunlight on grassy hills Turn from the glitter of diamonds To lush Emerald richness. ============================= Later, Tripod and camera became her obsession As sunlight mixed with clouds Painting vistas below us with Patchwork shadows That lumbered in slow steps Across the afternoon. =============================== So the road takes us to new places ... just read the first and this chapter in new adventures.... me thinks the view thru thy pen will be just as interesting as her view thru lens... both will reveal hidden hues of the poet.  and? the moth is smiling that the rhyme was not left behind  |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
imagery abounds....your gift profound wonderful...enjoyed the trip |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
very very nice |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Ozark Mountain Dew?....Litnin?....hey, can I go too? |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Hmmmm...what's developing here?? |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Very, very interesting........  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very enjoyable! Margherita |
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Quiet Acquiescence Member
since 2003-02-16
Posts 70somewhere out here |
*sniffle* *sniffle*  oh how wonderful. I love it. ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ "I waited a while, Watching the sunlight on grassy hills Turn from the glitter of diamonds To lush Emerald richness." ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ That was one of the many parts I liked. ~*~me~*~ "Remember, courage is wings." |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Great story telling Ron....we're hanging on every word and seeing each image.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
CpatHair - This brought back some not too dissimilar memories hatched in Tennessee, circa '76...thanks for the scrambled eggs, I take my coffee black Rf [This message has been edited by Robert Frazier (02-18-2003 05:23 PM).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Well, if it's fiction, you do a damn good job at it. Ever write a book? If not, you should! Cor |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
nothing needs to be repeted. i liked it a lot the Wind is invisible. |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
BRAVO!!  BRAVO!! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
BRAVO!!! How I'd love to bathe in those kind of springs right now and walk barefoot on those alpine meadows just across those ridges, dear friend, they say in some places the water falls like wine but I would choose the dew any day, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Love this...one of my favorites...James |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Beautifully done, I love the way the tale moves along. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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