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Straight or On the Rocks?
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Straight or On the Rocks? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
When the ice hit I was home. The hills are steep and roads wind Like ribbons stuck the sides of incline As if designed by a committee of drunks Convinced the only way to get from here To the other side was to wend your way there first. So... I made coffee, strong and hot Just before the lights went out with a crack of limb And a shower of sparks that danced slick on the ground. I just found a chair and sat looking out At the carnage nature provided to remind me Of another place and another storm. Iambe was already angry when I came in that night Off of slick roads and a two day trip over towards The panhandle, where I had dropped a load of steers Then waited to haul another back. Somehow, all that had every been wrong between us Was on the tip of her mind like the part of an iceberg That shows above the water with the rest laying somewhere below Just waiting to gouge holes in anything that gets too close. I think I said something meant to comfort And heard in return the first sounds of the bottom Being raked. Being a bit slow I asked if it was this bad why did we stay together Hoping she would say she loved me Not realizing she would tell me that her saying that Meant I was asking her again to give and follow Some devious pattern of manipulation It was too cold they said for ice… But it came anyway in sheets of drizzled rain That clung to limbs, adding weight that eventually Caused things to break. I looked at it out that window in Arkansas Sipping now tepid coffee and feeling the chill creep And remembered I never heard those three words and poured myself one straight I'd had enough ice. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (03-27-2003 11:05 AM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
She never quite disappears, does she?  Lucky us...and so good of you for the indulgence of giving us the past... Iambe does have a way of rocking the rocks... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Awesome...  regards to you, sudhir |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"I never heard those three words and poured myself one straight I'd had enough ice." Humm..I saw another side of Iambe this morning. Cool..calculating..was she? stay warm...sip that drink with no ice okay? ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Cpat Hair - three words that mean so much, yet it amazes me when it's not heard from one. I wonder at times why, and if the other party doesn't really know what those words can mean to someone... BC |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Found the iceberg reference so revealing of her, and of him.... Interesting relationship. You give much for me to mull over, and a lot of my own memories seem to surface when I read you. Even what those three words ~really~ mean. Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Somehow, all that had every been wrong between us Was on the tip of her mind like the part of an iceberg That shows above the water with the rest laying somewhere below Just waiting to gouge holes in anything that gets too close." Think I would like it straight as well, too much ice in my past.... I loved this on many levels... Susan |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, ouch... icicle speared straight into the heart... Dang, you're good. *G* [This message has been edited by suthern (03-28-2003 11:43 AM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And heard in return the first sounds of the bottom Being raked. ======================== oh damn....... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And heard in return the first sounds of the bottom Being raked. ===================== I've heard this sound before.... let me see...where was that.... ........ ........ ........ ........ hmmmm ..... ...... ...... oh yes....when the Titanic hit the iceberg... need i say more?  |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Ron, my response to your writing has become predictable...and i always come back for more! Rf |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'It was too cold they said for ice… But it came anyway in sheets of drizzled rain That clung to limbs, adding weight that eventually Caused things to break. I looked at it out that window in Arkansas Sipping now tepid coffee and feeling the chill creep And remembered I never heard those three words and poured myself one straight I'd had enough ice.' Which is why this winter, I learned how good rum tasted in coffee! I got the next round... |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Somehow, all that had every been wrong between us Was on the tip of her mind like the part of an iceberg That shows above the water with the rest laying somewhere below Just waiting to gouge holes in anything that gets too close. ******************************************** Someone else living in my world. Brother, this write hit a little too close to home, however it was exactly what I needed to see. Thank you Imagine all the People living life in peace... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) I would never want to be swept on the rocks like that surely, but straight would cut like a ratchet too I can imagine! (sigh) This sure was a tugging write, dearest friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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