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.....Sordid Apology..... |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach 
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~~~~~~ Eyes downcast body trembles slightly You realize now deceit will not be taken lightly. Palms grow damp Beat of heart does quicken. Mouth turns dry causing tongue to thicken. Apology made with stammered speech. Acceptance now seems far out of reach. Unexpected tears turn pale cheeks to blush. Dropping to your knees in an embarrassed hush. "Please forgive me this" you plead sincere. Head bowed in shame true love lost you fear. "Such a fool am I" "And all for what?" The answer came swift- My door in your face was shut. ~~~ Chris Barker 2003 `````` |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oops. Did I stumble into a private feud? Nothing seems more final than a door slamming in your face. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Chris! Very good! An extremely heartfelt plea when we know we closed the door to human kindness much to rapidly. It is so easy to misunderstand one another - and to know when we are inadvertantly closed an open door...is total understanding. Thank you for this reminder... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
My interpretation a little different. I thought you meant you closed the door on him/her, who harmed you. It usually takes me three to four times of being hurt by another before I decide to not even open the door. Remorse from others has always been my weakness, however. Forgiveness, a must, there go I but by the Grace of God, etc. But, when a pattern is repeated, no matter the tears of sorrow and remorse for what they've done, for my own protection, I must keep them out of my life. And, turn them over to God to handle....and He will...in time...hopefully, they eventually will have learned, but some simply cannot be honest. Sad! I liked this. It is a good reminder of where I've been and lessons I've learned along the way of growing up, something, even in my fifties, I sometimes am still trying to do. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (03-26-2003 06:57 PM).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Nice work, Chris. This could have many meanings. Sandra |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Oh my, Chris! Someone sure made you mad, huh? |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Midnitesun, Karilea, Pat & Sandra - thanyou for your comments. Actually I wrote from past experience of what I "would have liked to have done" to ones who have hurt me. But, I wasn't raised that way. Apologies if sincere, should be accepted.......unless of course you have heard the same old lines time and time again. Yes, this can be thought of in many ways I suppose. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
SmartChick - oh, dear poetess, if you only knew. lol. Yup...but I am a pretty tough cookie. Thanks for reading & commenting. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Wow! Your door speaks loud and clear. But even a door knows that deceipt can never be undone A powerful kick at the end! I Like this! Liz |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Nightshade~ I have done this a few times in my days....nicely done! Lauren~ I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Hmmm, I seem to have stepped into a meeting of sisterhood here. (backing out, closing the door.....silently) Nicely written Chris |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) I too can't stand that kind of reaction and sound, dearest friend, I am very sensitive when others shout or scream when they're angry and go to a quiet room so I don't have to hear it and hope I never have to confront that kind of situation! (sad sigh) I hope this doesn't relate to you, dearest friend, I send comforting angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Elizabeth, Lauren, wranx & Noah, thankyou all so much for reading & commenting. "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wow! You sure pack a punch little sister.  Excellent write! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
vandana - thankyou Nancylee - come on...put up your dukes!! lol. thankyou much & luv ya!! "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
...some lessons reverberate louder than the doors they slam... -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Ed's reply elicited a giggle from me! Also enjoyed reading all the other replies that your poem elicited. Seems like there is a whole lot of understanding and identifying going on among your female readers! You can add me to the list as well! Peace, Love & Light, Linda |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Nightshade - strong write and feelings, hope all is well with you... BC |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Mark, Linda & Bill, thankyou dear poets for being so kind. "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Some apologies are only words without any sincerity whatsoever... they deserve being met by slammed doors. *S* I like this very much! *S* |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Thankyou suthern! "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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