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CSKpoet
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since 2002-07-12
Posts 845
Island in Paradise

0 posted 2003-03-26 02:11 AM



I hear you now,
the night complete,
a victorious blue breeze
brushing rainbows for
my mind, and all the
passions of the world
take character ...

one word, moving swiftly
like an arrow through the
crowd, caught in a windsong;

I hear you now,
this word ...

moistened by your poetry,

like sunshine to the buttercup,

only you can be

my love.

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

© Copyright 2003 Cheryl Stewart Koomoa - All Rights Reserved
BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
1 posted 2003-03-26 02:32 AM


one word, moving swiftly
like an arrow through the
crowd, caught in a windsong;

This bends against the bough
and tugs at my heart strings.

*lovely*



garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
Florida, USA
2 posted 2003-03-26 03:09 AM


Cheryl, sweet lady, your writing is so
beautiful, regardless of what you write about. I love your poetry, friend.

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2003-03-26 03:39 AM


"only you can be my love."  Like this...James
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577
displaced
4 posted 2003-03-26 04:41 AM


big warm smile on my face now
regards2you
Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940
California
5 posted 2003-03-26 05:15 AM


Cheryl,

There is something special about this poem. The balance and thoughts seem 'just right'!

"windsong", I've always liked that word.

and this line, refreshing, alive:
"like sunshine to the buttercup"

and this is truly how it is, tut, would be:

"only you can be my love" oh, how right that is.

You did a great job with this, it especially speaks to my heart and my feelings.


Hope you are doing well, Cheryl,

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown
6 posted 2003-03-26 06:39 AM


Very nice poem!
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