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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{And that night, when it stopped raining} The sea spread her waves having already felt space of tears the sun took back it's veil: your reflection looks older in shades of blue {kissing your palms} ready to fall evening pitches another hue each fade while inside your heart, shimmers soft drops; "good times" I hear you say "I'm tired darlin" laughing (only) two stops south and summer arrives what did that mean? I failed to completely comprehend the idea of such art could alter anything moments of time moments of such language -- including this -- could kiss me in forms of water I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light You come to me out of my dreams Across the night [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-26-2003 01:33 PM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - I sit here and read this verse, and then come to reply and I'm at a loss for words to say. As always... BC |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Lauren, reading your beautiful imagery always paints watercolor portraits in my head, sweet friend, yay, I love this, and may you always cast a stone and see ripples of smiles on the ocean! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is a beautiful painting with your words. I could see each verse as you described it. Very beautiful. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Gotta love those Greeneyes moments. I sure do!  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You're talking my language Lauren... You rock the sea so gently beneath the waves of emerald green then turn the tides to shades of blue and brush them back again. Dang~ So pretty you are~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The sea spread her waves having already felt space of tears the sun took back it's veil: your reflection looks older in shades of blue {kissing your palms} ready to fall evening pitches another hue each fade while inside your heart, shimmers soft drops; ======================================== I could read you till I went blind... and then Id' trace the exquisite words with me mothy fingertips.   "and when we get to the pearly gates ... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I hear you say "I'm tired darlin" laughing (only) two stops south and summer arrives what did that mean? you just amaze me... constantly not many do. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
your softness of words shimmers in this one Lauren. *s M |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
I love it, as always.. it's wonderful  Tara "in my field of paper flowers |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
What can I say that has not already been said Lauren? Beautiful...amazing write! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
The whole write was soft like a caress... A very private moment, we are all blessed to share in. TD |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You truly are an artiste magnifique ... Love & Light, Linda |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
i love to read your poems! they have so much heart, and texture. Rf |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yes lauren, what Ron said...Amazed, surprised, and always like opening a gift. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren...soft, sensual and delicious, as always. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Lauren - in forms of water you have painted a picture of love - this is amazing xxoo could kiss me in forms of water just amazing . . . xxoo |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Adding to library..... I just love the way you look inside and outside at the same time. Beautifully done. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Simply amazing write! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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