The Soldier (repost from Critique)

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Open Poetry #25

The Soldier (repost from Critique)

SimplyGold
Senior Member

since 2002-07-10

Posts 1453

0 posted 2003-03-25 11:15 AM

This poem was posted in Critique. Comments and critique appreciated. Trying to improve cinquain style.

The Soldier

Oil fields
light the desert
sleeps the weary soldier
cradled by the Arabian night
home sick

SG

[This message has been edited by SimplyGold (03-23-2003 05:39 PM).]

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Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

1 posted 2003-03-25 02:47 PM

It may look like a little iddy biddy poem, but it packs a powerful punch...I felt that right in my solar plexus--and in my heart chakra...

Peace & Light,
EA

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

2 posted 2003-03-25 03:35 PM

Powerful!

Thomas119gold
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since 2002-06-03

Posts 708
Biloxi, MS (city by the sea)

3 posted 2003-03-25 03:43 PM

Power in so few words

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