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In Beg of Undercurrents I Write
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In Beg of Undercurrents I Write |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Wrap some words around it Fair lace tatted phrases Showing daylight through Carefully executed patterns But covering enough Modesty Is privately reserved. I would that my eyes Read true the tears Gathered in the cistern of me And that my lips drank Of the bitterness from each stifled scream Or anguished cry of ENOUGH!! Should I die Before the next sunrise Would I be judged a mortal sinner For denying these things To me? to whom? For wrapping words around it And leaving the rest… Inside? Or would it matter at all Such small sacrifices of transparency Made for lack of courage When it came to exposing The raw un-hemmed edges Of those words And feelings What if? Who knows.... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I'm keeping this. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What if? Some know... "I would that my eyes Read true the tears"... some know... "And that my lips drank Of the bitterness from each stifled scream" some feel... "What if? Who knows...." we would... and what Kacy said. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
My knees are beginning to genuflect... Peace and Light, EA |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) I think some words are better left un-hemmed, you want to be able to detail every part of the grand design and of course you always want the light to seep into every image and that is how words left unhemmed get a cotterpin of their own! (big hugggsssssss) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Oh damn! You continue to outwrite yourself and keep me in tears.... So touching! Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
When it came to exposing The raw un-hemmed edges Of those words And feelings Oooh, I love these lines...heck I love the whole poem!! Very good. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Wrap some words around it Fair lace tatted phrases Showing daylight through Carefully executed patterns But covering enough Modesty Is privately reserved. I would that my eyes Read true the tears Gathered in the cistern of me And that my lips drank Of the bitterness ======================= Should I die Before the next sunrise Would I be judged a mortal sinner For denying these things To me? to whom? For wrapping words around it And leaving the rest… Inside? Or would it matter at all Such small sacrifices of transparency Made for lack of courage When it came to exposing The raw un-hemmed edges Of those words And feelings ================================ I dont know where you and Duncan are getting your inspiration today, but the wells of inked inspire are running deep and I want some of what ever this is!!! damn...this is one very cool poem.... yeppers...I keeping this one too "... and when we get to the pearly gates ... we will learn the things that they taught us were sins ... are really just called mistakes." Tom Kimmel  [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (03-24-2003 08:29 PM).] |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Powerful lament, Captain, one that could hardly be ignored. Well done. Sunkissed. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron "Should I die Before the next sunrise Would I be judged a mortal sinner For denying these things To me? to whom? For wrapping words around it And leaving the rest…" The words are there...between the lines, wheather you know it or not.  |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
True talent at its best. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
The chill grows colder as the words get deeper... -MVS You CAN make a difference: |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Or would it matter at all Such small sacrifices of transparency Made for lack of courage When it came to exposing The raw un-hemmed edges Of those words And feelings What if? Who knows....' I'm going to try very hard to get this verse out of my head today. Questioning so interferes with my serenity!!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...damn into my library with his gem! |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
*sigh*...I wish I had written this... You are amazing...great work. H. [This message has been edited by WhileIWasGone (03-25-2003 09:36 AM).] |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"For wrapping words around it And leaving the rest… Inside?" Don't we all leave things inside until the time comes that we meet someone that for some unexplainable reason makes us want to purge? I loved every word of this... Susan |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Should I die Before the next sunrise Would I be judged a mortal sinner For denying these things To me? to whom? I'm lost in the pause of that thought and so I'll wait for it to come to me, which I'm certain it will in some form or another. Oh how I love the way you write Cpat~ |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Very nice poem! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
no one uses metaphor with such excellance as you do.....incredible weaving of words |
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