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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Oh so now you have time to look back and reflect To go seeking forgiveness, and expressing regret Loving only yourself for the length of your years And now you come running with lies in your tears? Where were you on that night, that I sat there and cried? Alone through the night that my best friend had died When I was teaching myself to grow into a man Weren't you teaching yourself to survive in the pen? Where were you on that day that I filled up with pride? That a woman could love what my heart held inside Remember in anger?, our tempers would burst? Since I knew what was coming I'd swing at you first? And now you are sorry, And you take it all back? It all never happened? My heart isn't black? Yet now you are sorry,and isnt it odd? Keep all your sorry's Save your sorry's for God |
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Denea Furr Junior Member
since 2002-11-03
Posts 31Indiana |
your poem was deep. i like the way you expressed yourself. "What a tangled web we weave, when we practice to decieve." |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Sorry doesn't sit too well after it's all been said and done, but it's alot better than holding a grudge. Could feel this creeping under my skin. Much enjoyed~ |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
A funny thing about poetry, you can have forgiven long ago, yet still express it this way.I hold no grudges.But I can still let it out in a torrent of fire.Make sense? Jason |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
This seems familiar? I think we discussed this once. Regardless, the point is and I'm sure you know this through some of my posts is that I truly understand this. [This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-22-2003 06:13 PM).] |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Yea Raph we discussed, I had to edit to post outside mature.And after reading your post we understand each other in uncanny way, though I must say my post are blunt, where yours have an artistic quality I admire. Jason |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Jason - I replied to this in mature - still sending the same message - xxoo |
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Gina Culliney Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 170 |
Glad you posted this particular piece. The impact of human duress reads loud and clear in the poetic format you have laid out so elequently. Emotional, tense, and solemn. Sobers us all up to real human nature. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
A poem expressing bitterness, contempt, hatred, anger and unforgiveness. You wrote all those very well. I could feel each one. The only line which was unbelievable was the one on which he, the father, I presume, the one asking for forgiveness, loved himself. Quite a talented writer. Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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