Open Poetry #25 |
hey you! (senryu) |
kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
you staple to me, then punch holes all over me What games do you play? |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
ouch! stapled, spindled, shredded... love is as fragile as paper hearts [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (03-22-2003 12:28 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
kaile - nice job - lets just say that I have trouble drinking water now and then . . . lol xxoo |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Not the kind of games that I would like to play! --and not the kind of games that I would like to see you, dear kaile, play either! Peace & Love, EA |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Good one Kaile! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big huggggssssss) Oh Kaile, this is so very powerful, sweet friend, I can understand the frustration as I never want to play those games either! (sad sigh) I send healing hugs your way, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kaile, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
A very modern senryu..we can relate. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Yes I like this one alot! Jason |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Well done kaile!! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
thanks for reading my favourite senryu to date...and Noah, fret not..this isn't autobiographical...i saw my stapler and hole puncher on my study table one day and this senryu was born.... Kacy, love your comment about love being as fragile as paper hearts |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Isn't it amazing where our inspiration comes from? The visuals are very good, kaile. When you think you have heard it all, |
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NavySEAL Junior Member
since 2003-03-21
Posts 17 |
this is awesome, so powerful. I love it. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I do a duet with my electric pencil sharpener, if ya really want to know... Cute senyru... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Nice office fight. No, in all seriousness, I love the starkness of this piece. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Kaile, I think I like the uniqueness of this, but I also love senryus, so Hugs, Ethel |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
Hmm... this reminds me of my humor poems a few years ago about the "Pen with a Feather on it" , maybe ill make it a repost. IQuite unique I must say a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
very interesting *s I would never have thought of this. ~A~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ouch! *G* What a unique and wonderful description of dysfunction! LOL |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yeah...I've been there too...good write |
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