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Severed Wings
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Severed Wings |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Sightless nights claim the sun, Where brighter days were once king. Broken dreams taken up in it's grasp And tomorrows lies pour in. Forked words in deafening pitches, Sebered Her wings and made Dull the golden ring about her head. A spirit defiled by pleasures Taken from havens not of my own, Cause crimson trails to lead, To the final resting ground, Of displaced members, Once fitted for a Celestial Queen. The taste of iniquity and the rush Of sin become the downfall of She Who held the heart of this lowly Scrivener. Sever the wings with single etyom And close the tome to conceal, The great spectacle. I hear not the cries, nor do I Concern myself. Cardinal virtues at my fingertips Let merciful prayers of forgiveness, Go unanswered. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
strongly written...and sad.. seeped with closing anger... you capture well the emotions and feel here.. I enjoyed |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
**Tipping my hat** Thank you Cpat! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Albert, this is so very sad, sweet friend, may these wings reform soon and may all the victims of the wounds and scars learn to fly again and believe they can reach the light! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I send angel hugs to all the downtrodden and saddened, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Albert, thnak you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
This has an Old World charm. *s (You might want to correct your typo-- "Sebered" should be 'severed' in the first stanza, 6th line.) When you think you have heard it all, |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so sad. but I like it. It gets my vote Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Albert Your words were so very powerful and so beautifully written. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Thank you everyone! That means so much to me. Sorry about the spelling errors. Once again...that's typing in the dark for you!!!  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I wish the story would continue ..... because it's too sad to close like this..... very impressive though. Margherita |
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aries_luv_ppl Senior Member
since 2001-09-20
Posts 1448Universal Mind |
 ~Every girl has a dream within. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I enjoyed your words..amd smile at Chanson ( she and I are sort of spelling experts  )M |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Thank you Aries. Margherita. I closed tome and concealed the horror, never again to look upon it. That's what made me all better  Thank you for your comment!! |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Thank you Nakdthoughts! Once again my apologies for the errors. |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
Very sad but really good poetry it gets my vote Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Albert, this is a very good poem.  Hugs, Ethel |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sorry, I fogot to check the vote box. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
a very powerful piece! it's got my vote! |
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