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Death By Crow (rictameter)
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Death By Crow (rictameter) |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Death By Crow By Crow Is a hard death. A wounded sandpiper Flailing, lurching, trying to flee Or swim along the edge of the water, Tiring, sagging while the crow waits Patient on the sandbar. So black, this Death By Crow. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Death by crow, very interesting. Quite an inventive write.  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
It was hard to watch. I tried to drive the crow away by throwing rocks at it, but it just dodged and stayed there.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed, this is a very strong write. You know that I love the form, too. And, putting it on to the left instead of centering it really worked on this one.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Ratleader, I once had to watch two dogs tear apart a poor little kitten. They were both too big for me to make any impression on them whatsoever. They ignored my threats, the stones I threw, and even the threat of the broom I clobbered both of them with. It was horrifying, and unfortunately the natural course of things in the animal world. Cruel and heartless it seems, unable to be understood by us humans, but nature all the same. I'll never forget that poor kittens horrible cries. I'm sure this was very difficult for you to witness, and to write about.  |
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noah j Member
since 2003-03-05
Posts 82on the open road with the wind blowing in my hair |
i really enjoyed this--in particular the imagery. the only people for me are the mad ones-mad to live, mad to be saved, desirous of everything at once--jack kerouac |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yep, I'm from Missouri, don't have much use for crows..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Ed I was reminded of a Stephen King book called "The Stand" when I read this. Black crows played a significant part in the book and were just as you described. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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Salt New Member
since 2003-03-19
Posts 9 |
Nice topic! The smallest instances may invoke the greatest writing.... Peace P.S. - Will someone please check out my post. |
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