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Ratleader

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0 posted 2003-03-19 05:44 PM

Boomer ang

Boomer
ang wheeling her
ky-jerky arounda
bout the field, misses the ima
ginary bird, still near level, then ris
ing, turning back, losing moment
um, falls at my feet. Won
derful flight, boom
erang!

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (03-19-2003 07:42 PM).]

bsquirrel

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1 posted 2003-03-19 05:48 PM

I liked how you e.e. cummings-ized the rictameter. The only thing is, in rictameter, the first and last line should be the same. It sorta is, and it sorta isn't in this case.

I always appreciate someone willing to hit right against the boundaries of a form and try to break through 'em.

Mike

Stella was a diver and she was always down.
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Ratleader

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2 posted 2003-03-19 05:49 PM

Push that envelope!

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Martie

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3 posted 2003-03-19 11:09 PM

Ed...Would like to see it in action...the boomerang has always facinated me. Interesting the way you wrote this.

garysgirl

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4 posted 2003-03-19 11:15 PM

Yes, Ed, I love the way you did this.

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Ratleader

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5 posted 2003-03-20 12:07 PM

Mainly teasing vlraynes, who had reminded me to start with a two syllable word...(apologized first, of course)...but it had started me wondering whether you could break words and live, if you had just the right subject. Once I get an idea in my head, I just have to find something to do with it.....

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ljossberir
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6 posted 2003-05-08 11:52 PM

very creative style, Ive never seen anything like it (sort of like William C.Williams) but a heck of alot better.
-matt

SimplyGold
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7 posted 2003-05-26 04:40 PM

Most creative. Enjoyed it and has me wanting to learn more about rictameters.

SG

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