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Moonbeams...........My first Rictameter (??)
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Moonbeams...........My first Rictameter (??) |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA 
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Moonbeams Are a bright glow Shining from the Heavens From the dark velvet skies of night Brillance of moon never getting too dull As the moon shines, the stars sparkle Helping the moon give light Through dark of night Moonbeams ~**~**~ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I like the way you move the poem, which is harder to do in a short piece -- adding the stars and building them into the action, then focusing everything back to the source. Nice piece of writing, this.... I predict you'll be doing more of these, eh? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
i like "concrete" poetry like this. reminds me of a couple of other yellow moon poems done this way. someone ought to collect them. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 yea! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed, that makes me feel good for you to say something nice about my poem. Thank you very much. And, yes, I already have another one done. LOL I'll probably work a little more on it and post it tomorrow. I really love to do these poems with the syllable count.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
S Arthur Grey, thank you very much. I'm glad that you liked it. I don't think I've seen the other moon poems yet. "Love makes the world go around" |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hi Dixie  Thank you, friend... "Love makes the world go around" |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Ethel~ Very well done. I haven't started on mine yet but hopefully soon. Looking forward to your next one...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ethel, Grinning here for your courage and success at moving forward with writing various forms of poetry. As Dixie said, "Yea!" Good for you! And, glad you are not stopping at one. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Paul, they're really fun to do. I'll be looking for yours. Hugs, Ethel |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your first? I'm jealous! Spot on, Ethel! Good job! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Pat. Yeah, I can't get one form down pat, before these fine poets introduce me to another form I've never heard of. LOL Seriously, it is fun to try to write these different forms, with their syllable count and everything. I'm really not quite sure if I've got the other aspects of this form just right yet, though. But, like I said, it's fun trying..  Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ethel - you go girl!! I have never tried one of these. You have done a wonderful job. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Chris. You should try them. It's fun...  Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Ethel, this was marvelous. I don't know what a rictameter is supposed to sound like or look like, but I loved what you wrote and how you wrote it. I suppose one of these days I should pop in and take a class. Can an old dog really learn new tricks? Hugs, Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
What a beautiful gift you shared with us! Delightful in content and presentation! Have a glorious sunny day and may the moon shine its loving glow on you (and Gary!) this night! Warm springtime hugs, Linda |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Karilea!! I didn't see you there. I really appreciate your reply... Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
LOL Martie...yep, I'm an "old dog"..HeeHee!! Really, though, it's fun to do all this syllable stuff...and they say practice makes perfect, so, I'm practicing on ya'll. LOL I sure do hope ya'll don't mind.... Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Linda.... Did I ever tell you that Gary said he loves your comments and the way you include him in your replies? Thank you, friend. Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Ethel, your poems are always like a big warm hug as are your comments, sweet friend, yay, may like a childs blanket the light cover us all and comfort our hearts, yay, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ethel, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
What pretty images. I enjoyed this one, and I like the form. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ethel- this is soo beautiful - its perfect! I watch you as I have been here and you just keep getting better - loved it! xxoo |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done Ethel... not one to understand alot of technical forms...but this pleases the eye as well as the ear... I enjoyed |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Smiling... This piece danced upon the page, and through my mind. So pleasant, and joyful. ThisDiamond |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Noah, thank you so much for your nice words. I really appreciate you. Oh, and the picture is beautiful. Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Pilgimage, thank you very much for your swet words. I'm really glad that you liked it. Sue, thank you. That's really nice of you to say. Heart Hugs to you both, Ethel |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Capt. Ron, thank you very much, Sir. I appreciate that. Kathleen, I'm so glad that you liked it. Thank you very much. Heart Hugs to you both, Ethel |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Watching the sky, the stars, the moon and feeling the closeness to All there is .... and capture it so lovingly as you do, that's nice! Love, Margherita |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Margherita. It's good to see you back, friend...... Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Ethel, you did a fantastic job on this. |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
If this your first then its Pretty damn good LOL it really is good I love the Moon and grew up stargazing at it and the stars So I will be saving this and reading it next time. Thomas |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Well, this is just lovely Ethel. You did a wonderful job with this! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sue, thank you very much. I appreciate that a lot. Thomas, why thank you. Yeah, it was my first. I love the moon and stars, too. Thank you, too, for saving it. That makes me feel really good. Anne, thank you, Lady. I really appreciate you saying that! Heart Hugs to you all, Ethel |
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