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noah j
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on the open road with the wind blowing in my hair

0 posted 2003-03-17 04:53 PM



He wakes with no desire
Only the sad longing
Of a youthful observer
Looking on at the world machine
He wishes to join. . .

A small child
Looking at older kids
Begging to be able to play
They kick him and spit at him
Say he is too small
he can't do anything at all. . .

The things he sees
Are more than the world knows
The pot boiling up about to explode
But it is held in check
By a determination long since gone. . .

A girl all alone
Sees the end of her life
But she has so much to do
She has to love, to teach, to live
She stays up late at night
Begging god to give her a few more days
But where was she before. . .

Leaving the agents to play alone—
God created a lonely world,
lonely not for us, but for him

[This message has been edited by noah j (03-17-2003 07:51 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-03-17 05:00 PM


Its easy to feel this way. That is a profound question on the reason of creation. Why would an all powerful self suffient god create. Lots of things to think about.
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2 posted 2003-03-17 05:33 PM


Excellent poem...I really felt this deeply.
Eric

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Saluting with misty eyes
3 posted 2003-03-17 07:37 PM


Very deep conversation starter, this one.
Nicely done.

~You might say I'm a Dreamer, but I'm not the only one...
John Lennon

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4 posted 2003-03-18 01:54 PM


God - Noah this is amazing - left me with that same feeling - if God feels all through us why then why - would he want to feel our pain?  Very good xxoo
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