Open Poetry #25 |
I Gave You... |
sellout007 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 108Suburbs of Chicago, IL |
~ I Gave You ~ I gave you an ear to listen, when you needed to talk. I gave you a shoulder to wet, when you needed to cry. I gave you a hug of comfort, when you needed to be held. I gave you a compliment to boost, when you felt insecure. I gave you an, ok no big deal, when you needed forgiveness. I gave you my breath, when you needed to breathe. I gave you my wings, when you needed to soar. I gave you my soul, until you could find yours. I gave all that i could, when you needed it the most. But it was through you, I found love. Only through that love, was I capable of what I gave to you. A dream is but a dream, you can wake up. Reality is ultimate, and those who share it with us are far more important than anything we could remember, [This message has been edited by sellout007 (02-17-2003 01:16 PM).] |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Good poem... But the line I gave all that i could, when you need it the most. Sorta kinda messed me up.. lol.. Try changing 'need' to needed.. It would make me feel better.. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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sellout007 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 108Suburbs of Chicago, IL |
Opppssss.....TYPO! All fixed! Thanks for the heads up! o) A dream is but a dream, you can wake up. Reality is ultimate, and those who share it with us are far more important than anything we could remember, [This message has been edited by sellout007 (02-17-2003 12:49 PM).] |
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sellout007 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 108Suburbs of Chicago, IL |
Hmmmmmm im open to suggestions too people! I have no problem with anyone ripping my lil poem apart o) A dream is but a dream, you can wake up. Reality is ultimate, and those who share it with us are far more important than anything we could remember, |
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sellout007 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 108Suburbs of Chicago, IL |
Adding to library! A dream is but a dream, you can wake up. Reality is ultimate, and those who share it with us are far more important than anything we could remember, |
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