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littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

0 posted 2003-03-16 04:30 AM

Blood
spreading
slowly
crisp cool clean
blue water
tainted

My ship is sinking
and I am the Captain

I gaze into the last sunset
I will ever lay eyes upon
and smile . . .

For I can see the shore
I only need to swim

[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-16-2003 04:31 AM).]

bbent
Senior Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 521
Alaska

1 posted 2003-03-16 07:25 AM

certainly full of imagery...all I can think to say is bon voyage.

Live like it's your last day...
Dance like nobody's watching...
Love like you've never been hurt...

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2003-03-16 07:31 AM

the mermaid sees the shore,
and only wants to
slip into the undertide again.

hi sue
feeling very piscean today

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-03-16 12:17 PM

bent - thank you - bon voyage - yeppers

Michele - what a beautiful response - thank you so much - hehehe yes - saw your last one - ahh but to be a mermaid . . . - xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-16-2003 12:19 PM).]

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2003-03-16 12:53 PM

Sometimes I think if we look at the shore too long, we might not even attempt the swim.

sigh...when will I ever learn to quit treading water?

Heart hugs Sue...

(have you submitted something for the book yet? If not...why not? hmmm? tapping toe here...)

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2003-03-16 12:54 PM

great stuff! I really needed this today! Thanks!

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

6 posted 2003-03-16 12:58 PM

You can do it!
Swimmmmmmmmmm!

A stirring ensemble
of words this.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

7 posted 2003-03-16 01:31 PM

K - I did- they got lost - there is one in prose . . . ahhh well - need a kicker to get in there - havent gotten there quite yet - treading water - yes - well - my legs are just starting to kick because they just HAVE to - the shore - oh dont remind me . . . xxoo

shadows - awesome - glad it helped you

Chanson - Im a tryin I am . . .

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garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

8 posted 2003-03-16 01:59 PM

Sue, I love your poetry, this one is no exception.

Oh, and I like your smile in your photo, too....

I was wondering the same thing Karen was about the book.

(me going to look for your submission)

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

9 posted 2003-03-16 02:04 PM

Awesome write sue, god i miss swimming just not the whaling boats..

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

10 posted 2003-03-16 05:17 PM

Ethel - thank you sooo much - you always have such good things to say to make me smile

Raph - me too - we will both swim again soon . . . xxoo lol @ whaling boats - goodness already - thank you - always means the world to me to see you complimenting my writing

[This message has been edited by littlewing (03-16-2003 05:20 PM).]

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