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Saturday Night Souls |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
So the anger and the booze Made you decide that 7 Was a good time to sleep. Well, it was ok with me I was tired of walking On my own words And picking pieces Of them out of Bare soul Your soles now Lie uncovered, And I see they Are unblemished But then again You didn’t say Much… Except to make sure I knew how My words Were Dull |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
LOL! I've had dates like that.....uh, ALL of my dates were like that!  On the serious side, you continue to make every word serve to set the perfect mood....a real gift.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you sir... think I'll stick to free verse and leave the rhyme to those that do it well..  you were right..you could see why I don't work in rhyme.. LOL |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Oh dear, this seems so real. Isn't love grand? Sorry. I just got a phone call (honest, 10 min. ago) and that woman, from anger and vodka, first, wiped out the entire kitchen, every dish, cup, pot, pan became air born and then fell asleep on the toilet! Slight communication gap, for her husband forgot to tell her he went fishing with a group that included a single woman. Who was the one who told her she went fishing with 'them'.... No laughing matter... heartbreakingly real. You captured a very disturbing part of life. Alcohol and anger and hurt feelings. Bad mix. Liked the word play re: sole/soul.... Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
When there's nothing to say, sleep is always a good option. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Your words poet sir..could never ever be dull!  ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Yep, I too am a Saturday night spirit, I like to stay up light and play the guitar as I stay up late every night so I can be acquainted with it after experiencing childhood nightmares! (sigh) So I find it medicine to sing through the night, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
fascinating...the images are mesmerizing, and yep, your words are never dull, walking on them couldn't even do that, though tenderizing I'm sure has been known to happen, I've seen it in your history Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
LOL -- Man's eternal quest...to escape alive just once...even once! Your imagery here is exquisite, and so's that gee-whiz atmospere you created with it. You are The Man. Which didn't help in this case, eh? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You ARE rhyme....don't fight it. But then, you are also a free verse master. You have a way of touching a nerve that was trying to hide unnoticed, yet desperately needing to be touched. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It's hell just before they pass out... sometimes misery does not love company. Hugs you. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
As said before...you have a real gift...  It's nice seeing you here on the weekends... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I've had that date and I've been that date. Not a total waste, you got a poem out of it!  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ron - far from dull here - far from it - nice job xxoo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love this! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
oooh, ouch. This was one bad night. Cor |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
It is bad when somebody wants to go to sleep in the middle of a conversation with you....and worse yet, if they do it. LOL |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
OUCH !!! ((((BIG HUGS)))) |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
When I've stepped on my words, I also ended up steppin' on a part of my anatomy best not trod upon. |
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lost_star Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 114NY, U.S.A |
Very cute. I liked this one! |
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LUV_R_GIRL2379 Junior Member
since 2003-04-09
Posts 42 |
ooh sounds like a really bad night! this poem was excellent! you have a very unique gift.keep on writing em'! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Ron... thanks for this - I was searching tonight...come across the second poem that reaches in and rings bells somewhere... hugs  K |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Your soles now Lie uncovered, And I see they Are unblemished interesting way of putting things across, of how you must have been looking at the ground, in the midst of this awkwardness.. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ron: I was tired of walking On my own words And picking pieces Of them out of Bare soul me too . . . me too awesome write xxoo |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Ouch...nice to see you posting, but..ouch, btw lmao at Ed's reply |
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