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the three door gentleman |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Falling through the looking glass he had our company-- my brother was 'the man' that night enjoying notoriety. Sisters, three, upon his arm, safe beneath his watchful gaze, bouncing bars of New Orleans, as he defied all hopes of try to any that might dare presume to cross those lines he drew. I remember how he looked at his sisters in perfume Startled: "This might sound perverse-- but looking at the three of you-- I'm proud to be your date tonight-- but somehow know I'm doomed." He shook his head at irony and muttered, "Any other time? I would call myself 'lucky'-- but it would be just like me to find these three New Orleans Belles-- the finest women in the town-- and be blessed with company-- I'm sentenced to a "Brother's Hell." He got the kisses he deserved and opened three doors, gentleman. All night he would pull back three chairs-- and ordered four drinks with panache. We started proper--uptown bound-- and slowly hopped our way. Down the valued avenue gradations of the money play. Until we found the place we know, where only natives dare to go. The Quarter was a block away My feet danced--so close to home. We stopped for yet another drink, and yes, he offered three more chairs. He was puffed in a proud stance with a proprietary glare-- I saw his eyes make men look down. My brother was a mountain man-- he had both width and height. His hair was wild as good St. John, and had defiant prophet eyes. Perhaps it was the whiskey drank or just I was so close to home but Janis played, on the jukebox and I dared to sing along. "Busted flat..." (I understood) This song was tattooed somewhere deep. So I stood there at the bar and wailed this song accompany I guess it was a blasphemy for one patron glazed eye bored. He must have took offense, I guess and startled me with a critique within the smattering applause he clapped slow and mockingly. Snidely with intent of fraud, and then he said to me: "You must think you're special, hon." (And ya'll know that hurt.) I thought that I was having fun but I felt shame upon my cheeks-- then I heard the crash of glass and the thud of stool on floor. My brother now was on his feet-- his fist in pound upon the bar. "You must think you're special too." My brother whispered in a hiss. "But she has reason to think so, because--she really IS." He'd broken long neck from the thrust shattered glass in vehemence-- and then he turned to broken man asking soft, "Don't you agree?" "If the lady will accept apologies and my regret, I'd like to buy her, the next drink, and pray that she'll forget." Oh the bar was quiet then waiting brother's calm reply. "All the drinks are now on HIM!" I looked around to see the smiles. Then they ordered drinks by brand. I thought the man was going to cry. My brother was his evil friend, saying, "I know you don't mind." "It's okay" the man replied and pulled the plastic from his hide, nodding to the bartender-- who gleefully complied. But we stayed for just one drink my brother nodded, "Grab your purse." Then back on the street again-- he shook his head and laughed: "I'm cursed." [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (03-16-2003 12:16 PM).] |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
I like this. Good story. Joyce |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Fine line between heaven and hell, knowing you I'd argue it was heaven  Miss you i'm drifting i'll be back soon |
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bbent Senior Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 521Alaska |
Damn!!! a long one that kept me glued from start to finished.Enjoyed every word of it. Live like it's your last day... |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
excellent writing serenity ... such talent!  Rex |
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Elan Member
since 2002-05-03
Posts 382State of Wide Eye |
You know me, and my sisters... know your brother for his wisdom... and his love. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
K - wish I had knew him - sounds like God made him just for you - my heart cries for this you know? But here: but Janis played, on the jukebox and I dared to sing along. "Busted flat..." (I understood) I understand this too - too much - much too much xxoo |
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SexyCowgirl19 Junior Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 24Colorado, USA |
good piece, very heartfelt |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity - another from your pen to hold in awe of your words... BC |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent...enjoyed....James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
a loving memory...smile, I wrote as much as I could recall of that night anyhow. grin. My brother cursed? Ha...we spoiled him! Thanks all for reading--we had a lot of good times, so please bear with me if a few more such as this pop up?  thank you [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (03-15-2003 08:15 PM).] |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
What a great memory you have shared with us serenity. Thankyou. Yes, please do gift us with more! cheers! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Hey K  I agree with Chris...please do give us more of these delighful stories. You had me cativated from start to finish....  Heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
A very descriptive poem. I normally don't get into the longer writes, however, as with the others, I was captivated from the beginning. You are very talented, and I do look forward to more from you. ~You might say I'm a Dreamer, but I'm not the only one... |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
To bum around with you three gals.. Now THAT would be a treat! What man could be blessed with such luck To have a night that sweet? I picture someone hitting on You gals - a BIG mistake! From Bourbon Street to Slidell They would hear the guy's bones break! And if they asked him why then he Could answer truthfully... "You're out of luck, you jerks. These gals are coming home with me!!" This is great, Serenity. I love little slices of life poems and this is a gem...MORE!! |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity~ A memory you will always cherish. yanno thats what brothers are for, too take care of their sisters and he did fine. Now you got me talking like you...#@$%&&* I remember when I was young, I could sit and listen to my my grandfather tell stories of his life all day long. You reminded me of this tonight...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Cursed? Yes, afraid so. Though I knew him not, I know him well. Well enough to know that the three of you were his pride and bane. Once had to ask a couple fellas if they'd ever seen a fight involving a beer bottle. They bought a round themselves. (All bluff though, wranx ain't like that.) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling... thank you |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
It's great when People have the talent to hold your interest! Great writing!!!! ~Al |
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