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Panhandle Storms |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I had been watching the cloud build Starting as it did on the horizon With cotton candy fluff teasing blue Then slowly turning grey and grow. West Texas dust stuttered against the window now In gusts much cooler than the oppressive day And high off the bottom of the anvil Streaks flashed brighter than the sun Which still held reign on this stretch Of dual lane lonely Angry purpled black in threaten Ate the remaining blue Obliging me to find the dim headlights A comfort The rumble now In bass Echoed To syncopated splat Wipers on I peer Not only for center line guides But for those wisps of you I see in every storm They dance in spray Naked Raw Whirl in splendid eddy At passing And disappear Like you Sometimes The wind blows me off Any guiding lane And I know again for a minute How it was With you |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The rumble now In bass Echoed To syncopated splat Wipers on I peer Not only for center line guides But for those wisps of you I see in every storm They dance in spray Naked Raw Whirl in splendid eddy At passing And disappear Like you ~*~ Thank you for the summer tremble... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Cpat Hair - like the way the West Texas storm flowed into how it was with her... BC |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'Sometimes The wind blows me off Any guiding lane And I know again for a minute How it was With you' Exactly. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
CPatHair, Can almost smell the rain coming! Travel through W. Texas every summer and you've nailed it...and the ending is another story altogether! I enjoy your work! Rf |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This is so perfectly written. I enjoy the entire description of the sky and storm brewing, just this side of a tornado about to develope and how you manage to tie it in subtly, but just the switch of one or two sentences, of a painful love gone wrong.... so talented!!! Enjoy greatly, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Wipers on I peer Not only for center line guides But for those wisps of you I see in every storm They dance in spray Naked Raw Whirl in splendid eddy At passing And disappear Like you Sometimes The wind blows me off Any guiding lane And I know again for a minute How it was With you ===================================== what you do with imagery and personification never ceases to amaze me...and touch the core of all my mothy unrequite. Im so glad you keep doing what you do |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Capt. Ron, if only I could write like this. It is superb, Sir....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
storms can be exhilarating and frightening at the same time...this one was all of that as well as quite enlightening of "her" Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"But for those wisps of you I see in every storm" this is perfect.... truly perfect.  |
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Amature2 Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 416 |
"Angry purpled black in threaten Ate the remaining blue Obliging me to find the dim headlights A comfort" Cpat Hair excellent portrayal of a west Texas dust storm and the fury it carries. Enjoyed very much, Thank you for sharing. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Stimulating, invigorating, captivating... Enjoy the weather! EA |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Stimulating, invigorating, captivating... Enjoyed the weather! EA |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Captain, you are a man of amazing talent. I was 'blown away' with this one. Excellent....love it!! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
an awesome write...I do love the storms! Thanks for sharing |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Enjoyed.  I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
This is well done Ron...enjoyed...Toe |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
The building storm is such a great allegory to a love going bust. I enjoyed this very much. KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Just out of curiosity....is there anything you CANT do?? Hmmm Beautiful piece. I can't say what has already been said about it!!!  |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, how strange the geographic location's weather can so very much relate to the turmoil and forecast deep in yourself! (sigh) Well, in Arizona, it is 85% sun every year so looks like the extended forecast will be tame, yay, can't wait to see where we go from here, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I wonder how does it really feel when you get that feeling that you "nailed one?" It must be wonderful! Would have loved to see this in the book but then you have so many to pick from. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Excellent work, Cap'n! *S* |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Much to read within the layers here, Ron. Wethering the weather. Cor |
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