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Open Poetry #25

IndividualPoem

LastMoments
Member

since 2003-03-07

Posts 92

0 posted 2003-03-09 11:08 PM

The room painted with fears
Of memory that seemed to eat
And works its way under skin
Steal the air that Im forced to breathe

My eyes become light crystal
That glimmer to the shine
Of falling tears that mark there ways
Of paths were yet to make our own

Paths most avoid by doubt
Yet the daring live to meet
Where skies rain trust and love
And forgiveness is never needed

When you reach down within you feel
As if you breathe in every moment
Every second a leading oppurtunity
A new brach, so delicate, yet can grow

Inside the warmth towards your numbing
The senseless mind that created
The failures that you've yet to ignore
But slowly become adhesive to a solid picture

Inside you know your search
For this place of peace amends
As life portrays a growing limb
That lives off basic stems

Stems we create, we choose
Stems that make us one, a whole
That create, an individual

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-03-09 11:15 PM

Beautiful imagery. I loved it.

Cold hands means a warm heart

majnu

Senior Member

since 2002-10-13

Posts 1088
SF Bay Area

2 posted 2003-03-09 11:50 PM

i agree with loner_23, your imagery is impressive in its intricacy. i also like the way the poem is tied together, its easy to lose focus on long poems but you avoided that.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-03-10 01:49 AM

very nice ending

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

4 posted 2003-03-18 12:49 PM

Nicely done!

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