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On the brink
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On the brink |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA 
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The rooster must have certainly been a parrot Since his call came at two in the afternoon. I tickled your ribs and you began to unravel, Until I slipped out of your warm cocoon. You made me an omelet with cheese and bacon. I learned that I loved you, but I remained speechless. We watched, from the balcony, the city awaking, Embracing the boroughs with stretching bridges. There was nothing to do and no one around, So we took the express train into Manhattan. The electrical worm swerved deep underground. When we came up for air -- it was already seven. We ate Middle Eastern, and smoked a hookah. The scent of jasmine colored the evening lavender. The moon on the skyline was like a bookmark As though we would one day return to this avenue. I remained speechless. The moment was fragile. A single touch and the clock would beat out of sync. A couple of words and it could have been tragic. You and I, -- we were falling in love on the brink... Check out my poetry here: http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master [This message has been edited by Master (03-09-2003 06:26 PM).] |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
It is sooooo good to see your work again. I have been away too long. This, as per your usual, is fabulous. And I'm sure you don't remember my name, but perhaps you remember a war between you, Michael and me... I WANNA BE ON TOP! LOL Uhhh wait... that doesn't sound good... on top of the poetry board... hmmmm..how do I explain this... (slinks out the back door, hiding a VERY red face) the only man worth your tears will never make you cry [This message has been edited by icequeen (03-09-2003 06:29 PM).] |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Who could forget the war? And it looks like the top is mine now!!! WHAHAHAAHAHA...  It's been a while since I posted anything.. but i'll try to be around more often now. Thanks for reading. Check out my poetry here: |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
You just came back eh? better start sharing more of your poetry! Anyone can write, But only poets can capture the heart. |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA Just you wait laffin |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what an awesome piece! |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I haven't seen your work in awhile....this is good!!!! ENJOYED!!!!!  Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Andre Brink |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Beautiful and jaded at the same time. I vote yes. I know it's over. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like this...James |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Andrey, this is lovely, sweet friend, I too love the almost surreal feel of this and somehow I too felt a wistful longing but nevertheless the afterglow enchanted these words, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Andrey, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Lovely poem, Master. This sums it up quite nicely!: "I remained speechless. The moment was fragile. A single touch and the clock would beat out of sync. A couple of words and it could have been tragic. You and I, -- we were falling in love on the brink..." I really like it. *s |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh I like this...it feels edgy. How many of us are on the brink and don't say anything? An excellent poem sir!  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent poem poet sir. ~A hug and a vote~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Very nicely done, enjoyed this read. |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
"The scent of jasmine colored the evening lavender." I was there once...with you in thought now ~A~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Very well done. Descriptive and with shades of jade that keep the reader's rapt attention... Peace and Light, Earth Angel |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I remained speechless. The moment was fragile. A single touch and the clock would beat out of sync. I like this very much, Master... these lines especially show the tension of going slowly, waiting for what will be. *S* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Master~ ALWAYS enjoy your writing~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Do come around more often, Master...you have a unique talent that we enjoy seeing you share with the rest of us... |
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