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Twilight And You
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Twilight And You |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Twilight And You as the sun fades down from gold and the house ticks loud in the twilight, I can tell myself it's harder to ignore the walls' laughter than a random thought of you. I could turn something on, anything, even the microwave, to drown it, listen hard to the book I'm reading; but it hangs there filling every pause, swells persistent as tinnitus while I click on a lamp, still lingering damp like the little chill across my shoulder just where your hand would leave a casual caress, the coolness waiting where your voice would be, that even the furnace can't dispell. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (03-09-2003 10:50 AM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed...I like this because it's so personal and deep feeling, almost to an ache. It touches a place that I understand.  |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
hard to ignore the aura of a room filled with past personal experiences, isn't it?...nice reflection  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yeah...a great write |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Wow, that was haunting. (trust me though, my washing machine can drown out thought itself. So if you are trying to ignore something, I'll send it over there to you) the Wind is invisible. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh...this lingered in exquisite yearning. Wonderful images. ThisDiamond |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Only someone who suffers from, or knows someone who suffers from, tinnitus, would know how to explain it, let along write of it... good job, Ed...very good... |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
You set the stage and image so beautifuly. Eric |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
ed, "Listen hard to the book I'm reading" Like that as well as entire poem. There are those times when I can't get that certain someone out of my mind... no matter the distractions... Enjoyed, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Indeed. |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
This hurts so good. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Very enjoyable poem, the yearning is felt. Margherita |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Ed This one was so different from the last one I read but I enjoyed it nonetheless. Once again the images were fabulous. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
hugssss, I know the ache this seems to let off....  Lauren~ Take me where the tides start |
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Aceo Fathi Junior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 17Anchorage, AK |
This is very good. My brother could drown out thoughts right now, but, you know, I can't exactly send him over.  I learned how to write from a friend of mine. Sometimes I think the student has surpassed the teacher :darklol: |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Those quiet times not always peaceful are they? Enjoyed the string of conscience. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Rat - ahhhhh - this one hit me - was utter beauty - haunting - but lovely . . . xxoo |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Sad longings, and I understand completely. Good job of writing! Deb |
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