Nothing Here ( Wind's challenge)

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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2003-03-07 10:30 AM

Nothing Here

I opened up my mind to see
the empty sense inside of me.
Nothing rose, existence not,
everything in mind's forgot.

Packaged pretty for none to see,
that empty sense inside of me.

Idling thoughts don't need to rid,
nothing claimed is nothing hid.
In between there is this place
where nothing lies in empty space.

That empty sense inside of me
is packaged pretty, for none to see.

Not a thing hollowed out,
silent words in nothing shout.
Unoccupied with nothing there,
I'm null and void contained nowhere.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2003-03-07 11:23 AM

packaged pretty, for none to see.
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silent words in nothing shout.
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clever word play and analogy here.
well done Poetess M.

peace & poetry

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-03-07 11:27 AM

Very well written words my friend.

Cold hands means a warm heart

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2003-03-07 11:56 AM

nothing claimed is nothing hid.

Yes, it's like what wasn't ever ours
to begin with.

That's a good thought to hold onto.

hugs Maureen~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-03-08 04:10 AM

yeah...

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2003-03-08 04:38 AM

You describe beautifully the moment when EVERYTHING is ready to expand secretly within.
Love, Margherita

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-03-08 04:41 AM

Maureen, you met the challenge very, very well..a lot better than I did...

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2003-03-08 10:14 AM

I thought I'd squeeze a challenge in since I was doing "nothing" at the time

It was fun to write and I thank all of you for reading and Wind for her challenge.
*s
M

Wind

Member Elite

since 2002-10-12

Posts 2981

8 posted 2003-03-08 09:26 PM

Sorry, missed this one. Thanks for giving it a try. You write nothing beautifully.

the Wind is invisible.
remeber me

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

9 posted 2003-03-08 09:27 PM

nakdthoughts - you are indeed packaged pretty...

BC

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

10 posted 2003-03-08 10:22 PM

It looks to me like you did this challenge very well.

DarkSide_Blues
Junior Member

since 2003-03-08

Posts 41
Fl, Usa.

11 posted 2003-03-08 10:27 PM

Oooh..Makes me feel all tingly. I love the rhythm of it. ^_^ Kudos.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

12 posted 2003-03-08 11:12 PM

nakd - packaged pretty you are - even though your words tell me otherwise - very nice - xxoo

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