Open Poetry #25 |
A list of things I love and miss.. |
Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Christmas day calm saturday morning cartoon fests hide and go seek till dusk The Flinstones at lunchtime Ernie but not Bert unlocked doors and friendly neighbours high school (kinda) porches on a summer's night the crackle of vinyl records lying on mediterranean beaches diving into the waves the smell of old books holding hands panting and afterglow my name whispered in my ear your smile your love you.. ____________________________________________________ I don't know if this poetry? I know it's a lament of sorts..i think i'll go to bed now my eyes are burning.. [This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-07-2003 02:06 AM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Raph, I loved the poem about things you love and miss....I also like the way you tapered it off to one word. Really neat... Hugs, Ethel |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph - you just brought me back to some memories there - I think all of us miss so many of the same things . . . lol @ Bert silly The ending - my heart sank with you - I am speechless - sorry that it is but a memory for you - wishing it wasnt - I feel the ache in those last words This was excellent - as always - xxoo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"My name whispered in my ear." I just like the way my name sounds coming off of a womans lips...james |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Raph, One of the things I love is this poem. Terrific! I too.liked the ending, though sad. I like the porch and and diving into waves, especially. Enjoyed, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I use to do "lists" of poems... works for me... it ALL worked for me... |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
dissing Ernie...... its okay, my son wanted to smash barnys purple face in, still does. the sweeter side of you, keep dreaming, it will come for u |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
A wonderful read, thank you for sharing |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This was a triple "R" piece--Real Raw Write! A slice of your reality with which many of your readers could undoubtedly identify--I know I certainly did. You evoked emotions and memories which, in my mind definitely marks this write as poetry. Sending you some dew drops to ease your stinging eyes---and I shall keep some for myself... Warm morning hugs, EA |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
it is poetry.. and a lement..and reminder for many of not all of us...of someone. enjoyed this Raph... good stuff. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I realize I don't respond to your stuff as much as I should, because I do read it all. I love this and most all of your work. You almost always hit a nerve of understanding. Susan |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"panting and afterglow my name whispered in my ear your smile your love you.." ========================================== Wonderful...This is poetry! Enjoyed every word...excellent! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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sweetwater Member
since 2002-12-16
Posts 178Perth |
This is fantastic, and original too, hehe thanks for sharing this. Peace |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
soft whispers..... Lauren~ Take me where the tides start |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Yep, it's poetry...good poetry! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
big smile |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Ethel Thanks and Hugs back love when you drop by Sue I'm glad you remember these things or anything considering how much older than me you are couldn't resist lol James I don't like hearing someone whisper James in my ear no offense i prefer to hear mine.. Pat one of the things i love is this response. Thanks! God i miss those waves Thanks Sunshine Mish I dissed Bert I love Ernie..you know as healthy as a man loving a puppet can be..and barney...don't get me started I still have suspicions he's the anti-christ..him or the host of survivor thanks marshalazu Thanks Linda, i tried to sit here and remember all the things i loved and while i ended it on a sad note it was still fun to think of these things that make life fun..or made Susan that's a great compliment i really appreciate that you read and reply when you can Thank you so much Nancy always nice to see you stop by thanks for readin sweetwater Lauren..thanks Thanks Duncan I made Dixie smile? Ah see it makes it all worthwhile then!! |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
holding hands panting and afterglow my name whispered in my ear your smile your love you.. trying to get us all hot under the collar romeo raph? lol you suprised me yet again, didn't think the poem was gonna end like that. ohhh scratchy crackly vinyl. love listening to my dads beatles n rolling stones records, well, i have renamed them MY beatles records! learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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rkcraig Member
since 2003-02-27
Posts 202Cincinnati, Ohio, USA |
i like this work Ernie but not Bert I always liked Bert better |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
As a matter of fact - now considering that you are still watching Sesame Street it is no wonder you see me as much older - mentally - heheheh gotcha! [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-07-2003 09:36 PM).] |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Gemma hot under the collar no no no..um..why did it work? You should know my poems end on a bittersweet note by now. One day i'm truly going to surprise eveyone and write something happy or full of hope! Bert better?! You're insane, ah well everybody's entitled to their own opinion i guess, however insane they may be.. Sue I see you as mental all right..and what's wrong with watching sesame street? It's very progressive what with the same sex relationship of Ernie and Bert, the delusions of Big Bird (yeah of course you see a giant whooly mammoth we believe you) The conjoined twin monster, and Oscar the homeless guy everything in life is covered.. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Raph--what gives this warmth, is its honesty and a bit of vulnerable. (it's not easy being green--my favorite) |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Oh My God - Oh My God - I cant stop laughing over here - Sesame Street *laughing so hard I cant type* - Sesame Street now look what you have done - made it into a CIA coverup scenario - you need help Romeo |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Martie thanks, C is for cookie not only my fav sesame street song but song in general.. Sue not a coverup at all its all quite overt. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ok ya got me there - was trying to get ya to laugh - touche |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Oh sorry, its ok if i wanna laugh i'll look in the mirror thanks o0 |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
HAHAHAHA Seriously? I'm missing EVERYTHING these days. The list is soooo long. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
You are gonna get it now - I just saw that *poke* |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssss) Oh Raphael, I too miss so many of these things, dearest friend, life should be far more simplistic just like this as I hate to move on from all of this too! (sad sigh) Very well-said, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Raphael, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
kacy just wait till you see the list of things i hate and don't miss..i'd have to post it as prose Sue what what did i do? Can yu poke the other and even them out? 0o -o oo Agreed Noah, i still watch saturday morning cartoons, well only two X-men evolution and Kimpossible rule! lol |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
HUGS |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well you list certainly conjured up great memories for me, but the list I have is way different than yours. I like your idea of a list of things you hate you don't miss, and I think you should start one in the forum and we all add to it, since it was our idea. I bet it will grow as long as the Geography thread. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I think I want to cry just because..you know what I miss!? I miss Jem and the holograms (back in the day when I was soo innocent) :p..sorry having a brief moment but when am I not..and btw I gotta diss Ernie I love big bird but nuff said..enjoyed stirs something up.. If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Oh yes...thankyou for this....good memories chase away the winter blahs. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
haha Raph - NO |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
smiling again... Raphael, you are such a beautiful person...I can tell...your writings are reflective and touching. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks K Thanks mysteria i thought of telling everybody to add on, and i have much more myself than what i wrote Ceinwyn no crying, there's enough to make us cry, think of the good stuff and sile at east every once and awhile..(ok maybe i should shut up and listen to this advice too) Glad to help Chris Sue oo Dixie thats so sweet of you to say..and btw..ditto |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Raph - did ya go pokin yourself in your own eye again already? I would have done it for you - ya know |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
Now that you've distorted my childlike view of Sesame Street *sigh*...well at least you didn't diss poor sweet Elmo! As I was remembering your list of things you miss...I was drawing back into my memory bank...till the end of your poem I was brought back to reality with a slam against the brick wall in my head. Love the way you brought everything to one word... Great job...can't we vote???? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Sue..curly block nyuk nyuk KristieSue sorry if i spoiled it for you, you really shouldn't mind me I'm just insane,and as for Elmo..sigh I once worked in the toy division of a dept. store..well i was there during the tickle me elmo phase and all its offshoots. The company the makes them decided it would be best to put a TRY ME label on the box..add that to the general stupidity of kids and parents who thought it would be funny to hear them all go off at once..do you have any idea what 50 Elmo's going off at once sounds like. the little @&$# is satan in my eyes..calm down raph..i'm ok...i'm ok |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ill just use two fingers *poke* *poke* As for Elmo - he is the new millenium Linda Blair -(I mean cmon - that thing is scary - having seizures already . . . dont get me started on the tubbies . . .) [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-09-2003 03:38 PM).] |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
is it poetry? oh yes... it is poetry...helen |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
A standing ovation is in order for this. God, I love it. (and I never liked Bert. He has a weird lookin' head and mad scientist eyebrows. I was scared of him lol) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thank you very much Helen Ice i couldn't agree with you more..he was ugly uuuuuuuuuugly. Sue don't you dare respond to this..our sad secret..grin |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
*lips are sealed* |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Christmas day calm saturday morning cartoon fests hide and go seek till dusk The Flinstones at lunchtime Ernie but not Bert unlocked doors and friendly neighbours high school (kinda) porches on a summer's night the crackle of vinyl records lying on mediterranean beaches diving into the waves the smell of old books These are a list of things I love and miss too... thanks for the sweet memories Raph. Maree |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Sue thats a first Maree you're very welcome glad to bring a smile and memories to the surface |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ok they WERE sealed . . . |
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