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Catching Butterflies
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Catching Butterflies |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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{The music of your heart pulls water from my eyes} tracing butterfly wings along a path that only you traveled I awake and touch-- count the raindrops breathe you in-- Wearing illusions of water reflecting that helpless moon still hanging I stand a l o n e as tides recede from shores laying new stones from the ocean's mind I touched you-- before I knew-- I read your words-- became real whisper upon my ears, from your lips {once more} life after rain Take me where the tides start So I can pull you into me [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (03-09-2003 10:04 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwwwwww, yay, I just love tyhis, sweet friend, this had me wishing so much for the spring to come so I could chase butterflies and see the rain fall again and rainbows come out knowing all is alive! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is beautiful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-07-2003 01:29 PM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lauren, such beautiful poetry... I loved it..  Hugs, Ethel |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I awake and touch-- count the raindrops breathe you in-- Wearing illusions of water reflecting that helpless moon still hanging I stand a l o n e as tides recede from shores laying new stones from the ocean's mind I touched you-- before I knew-- I read your words-- became real ===================================== You had me from the title on... your poetry is as unique and delicate as butterfly wings. This is so lovely poetess Lauren   |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Damn woman... one of these days I am going to grow up and write like this... except I am not smart enough or talented enough..LOL..so I guess I'll just keep enjoying yours.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh my Lauren..this is the most beautiful piece I think you have written.... Please use it for a book submission. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Lauren, This is lovely. I so enjoyed it. Nice just to reread for the feel of it. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren...I read it three times, each time being swept away with your words..like wings, like rain too. Beautiful! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Lauren - this just glides down the page. Simply lovely. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Lauren This was so beautiful and reminded me of a beautiful quote I found the other day. I thought I'd share it with you. "Happiness is a butterfly, which when pursued, is always just beyond grasp, but which, if you sit down quietly may alight upon you." Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Absolutely a greeneyes piece... this is beautiful, Lauren! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Absolutely beautiful words..you're a painter |
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angsana Member
since 2002-11-11
Posts 77 |
Beautiful poetess Greeneyes, You write words that are not only meant to be heard and felt, but also be seen, I love the way you weave your words in such a sensually visual way. Yes yes, I second Enchantress, please submit this for reflections on the Web, I very much would like to cast a VOTE!!!  angsana |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Wow girl... you did good!!!! Lovely indeed. Deb |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Left me a flutter! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Only you! Lauren |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Lauren - this is beautiful - felt my wings open up a bit there . . . xxoo I touched you-- before I knew-- I read your words-- - geez sometimes I despise this feeling check check hehehe [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-08-2003 10:24 AM).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is lovely, Lauren... Butterflies are one of my favorite themes.. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I just love the imagery that you have used here, it's such a great read, thank you for sharing Andrew |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
lovely as always *s M |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
came back as I saw you submitted for the book |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
This one sets up a delicious shiver. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Lady Lauren at her best, honey you just know how much I adore this, it is so softly beautiful, so softly you.... sister..I must have had my momma's will |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Beautifully done, it felt like butterfly kisses alighting. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You truly are a poetess--and a fine one at that!... Warm hugs, EA |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
emotionally sweeping on even tone...exceptional. this poem has a 'tide' of its own. Rf |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - Your words are as beautiful as those green eyes... BC |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! just beautiful! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I have no idea how I missed this, as could there ever be a better poem to "show who you are?" I absolutely loved this one, and it is now one of my favorites of yours Lauren. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ratleader takes a lesson in scatter-lyrics... makes mental note to keep practicing..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Peace all....tnak you for the Heartfelt words and smiles.... L~ I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
The imagery is astounding! Luv luv it. When you think you have heard it all, |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - How much better can you be? I love this, and would like to see it in the book. My vote... BC |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Absolutely a beautiful gem Charisma |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
im not buying the book unless this is in it  |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
A write as delicate as the butterflies wings Greeneyes ~ So beautiful. Bonnie |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Ocean wrapped around the sun |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This is very lovely....Enjoyed!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
your style has always reminded me of so many. . . this is why. . . it wouldn't be a book without you my friend. . . well done. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
Great write  Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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