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Confused Anxiety
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Confused Anxiety |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
In the midnight Beneath the moonlight She aches She screams She cries Body wracking sobs crash through her. A timid, helpless cry Pours icily out her lips "Help me" she softly calls. Deafening desperation assults my ears. Somewhere in this forest wild I am needed. Running, charging through the whipping branches Swallowing up the darkness as her plea swallows me I'm trying as hard as I can But still I cannot find her Her tears splash the ground And the sound echos, pounds through my ears The sounds are coming from everywhere But everywhere I've searched! Where could this desperate beauty be? If only I could see! Then one last cry A strangling sound And her body hits the ground I can feel her limp body fall I can feel it! The soft rumbling beneath my feet! She MUST be quiveringly close! But wait... Her breath. I cannot hear her breath... I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so sad. But I loved the poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you loner. It is quite sad...But it was how I felt at the moment. I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
KoKo, I think you did well in describing her anguish and torment. "If only I could see", I think is the line that brings this together for me, from my viewpoint. Often when that upset, I didn't/couldn't figure out what the real source of pain was in myself, nor help myself at those points in time. I really like this. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
An apt and creative portrayal of "Confused Anxiety"!*! I am breathing a little bit faster now--I must center myself.....there, that's better! Whew! Quite a ride! Warm morning hugs, Earth Angel |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Sad but smile  <~~Like this |
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KoKo Senior Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 995Inside the shadow's shadow |
Thank you much Pat!!! Earth Angel: Thanks!!! I'm surprised my poetry could have that effect on someone! Albert: lol, thank ya!!  I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man. |
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