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WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

0 posted 2003-03-05 02:27 PM

The sidewalk is melting into grass
as shadows blend the two.
Cement to blade,
black to green,
distortion of the view.
Deep of color change,
while no atoms rearrange.

This strange phenomenon,
this slip of dark upon,
a gift to sight,
a shift of light,
the slow descent of day
to night, my afternoon
repose, as shadows are imposed.

WhiteRose 03/05/03

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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1 posted 2003-03-05 03:09 PM

(smiles) Oh Anne, I love the sensuous imagery in this, sweet friend, seeing this before my very eyes looked like an acryllic painting to me, this has my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Anne, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Cpat Hair

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2 posted 2003-03-05 03:10 PM

nice... slips off the tongue easily with a tickle of words..to entice...

GG
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Lost in thought

3 posted 2003-03-05 03:13 PM

love the rhythm to this and it reminds me of how I love to watch day turn to night... or night to day.
Wonderful!

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

4 posted 2003-03-05 03:15 PM

Poetry in slow-motion...

Delightfully vivid and alluring--draws one in to that moment.

Warm hugs,
EA

Robert Frazier
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since 2003-02-06

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5 posted 2003-03-05 04:13 PM

well crafted! could visualize the shifting shadows.

Rf

Phantom Poet
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Arizona USA

6 posted 2003-03-05 04:20 PM

super has my attention
>>phantom poet<<

majnu

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since 2002-10-13

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SF Bay Area

7 posted 2003-03-06 02:26 AM

The sidewalk is melting into grass
as shadows blend the two.

that is one of the most amazing images i have ever read. rose you really hit it.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

prof.pishnu
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8 posted 2003-03-06 03:05 AM

quaint little poem

very enjoyable

bsquirrel

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9 posted 2003-03-07 12:47 PM

I've noticed that a few times myself.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

10 posted 2003-03-07 01:14 PM

Yes...very nicely done!
~Hugs~

passing shadows
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displaced

11 posted 2003-03-08 04:11 AM

love the way you see things

littlewing
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New York

12 posted 2003-03-08 11:19 PM

Rose - there is really a term for this - it really does occur - is an illusion between our eyes and the fading light - at dusk - things seem to move and change - you described this beautifully (have to get out my med books now) xxoo

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

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Florida, USA

13 posted 2003-03-16 09:20 AM

Anne, I thought I had already voted
for this one....there, now I have..

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

14 posted 2003-03-16 10:28 AM

This literally slides down the page, slips into the next dimension. Well done!

Albert J. Allie
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Queens NY

15 posted 2003-03-16 03:42 PM

Great writing!

suthern

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Louisiana

16 posted 2003-03-18 01:02 PM

And you've painted the transition perfectly. *S* Well done, Rosie! *S*

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

17 posted 2003-03-19 02:02 AM

I like this one....voting now!

passing shadows
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displaced

18 posted 2003-03-19 04:08 AM

me too...

DawnG

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19 posted 2003-03-20 12:20 PM

As soon as it quits raining and dries up around here, you have inspired me to go for a walk and watch the afternoon shadows fade into the evening sun and shadows. Beautiful poem and I also love the imagery.

Dawn

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

20 posted 2003-03-20 12:34 PM

Excellent wordplay whiterose my vote for sure

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

21 posted 2003-03-20 11:28 PM

Thank you Noah for you very kind words.

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

22 posted 2003-03-20 11:28 PM

Ron, thanks so much, I'm glad you enjoyed.

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

23 posted 2003-03-20 11:29 PM

GG, thanks so much for reading.

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

24 posted 2003-03-20 11:30 PM

Linda, thank you dear friend, for always reading and for your very kind responses.

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

25 posted 2003-03-20 11:30 PM

Thank you Robert, I appreciate you reading and responding.

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

26 posted 2003-03-20 11:31 PM

Thank you PhantomPoet, I'm glad you enjoyed.

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

27 posted 2003-03-20 11:31 PM

Majnu, well, you know.

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

28 posted 2003-03-20 11:32 PM

prof.pishnu, glad you enjoyed

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

29 posted 2003-03-20 11:32 PM

Mike, thanks for reading dear friend.

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

30 posted 2003-03-20 11:33 PM

Enchantress, thanks for reading.

WhiteRose
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31 posted 2003-03-20 11:33 PM

Dixie, thanks dear friend, your responses mean much to me.

WhiteRose
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32 posted 2003-03-20 11:34 PM

littlewing, glad you enjoyed, thanks so much for commenting.

WhiteRose
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33 posted 2003-03-20 11:34 PM

Thanks for the vote Ethel.

WhiteRose
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34 posted 2003-03-20 11:35 PM

Midnitesun, thank you for reading and responding with such kind words.

WhiteRose
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35 posted 2003-03-20 11:35 PM

Albert, thank you

WhiteRose
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36 posted 2003-03-20 11:36 PM

suthern, thank you dear friend for reading.

WhiteRose
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somebody's dungeon

37 posted 2003-03-20 11:36 PM

Thanks for the vote Sharon

WhiteRose
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38 posted 2003-03-20 11:37 PM

Thank you Dawn, for that very nice response.

WhiteRose
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39 posted 2003-03-20 11:37 PM

Aenimal, thank you for reading and for the vote.

Dark Angel
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40 posted 2003-03-21 05:44 AM

A smashing write Ms Rose

Maree.

Chanson
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Up Creek w/Out Paddle

41 posted 2003-03-21 06:49 AM

"The sidewalk is melting into grass"

What a yummy line and a great lead for
the rest of the imagery!
Well done, WhiteRose.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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