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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2003-03-05 10:41 AM

Yesterday's View

There are differences too great at times,
between the one I wish to be.
My thoughts caress the hints of you,
that never reached that depth of me.

It's painful loving shadow's walk.
It steps upon the time in hold.
A fear of loving, that which balks,
freezes once a feel of bold.

Escaping thoughts that ride my mood,
priceless too, your picture shared.
Haunted by the view of past,
I touch the edges, darkly squared.

I, handicapped, emotions run
from hot to cold to lukewarm feel,
wandering the dark alone,
searching for the switch to real.

I sleep with just a touch of light
dimmed, to slow my dreams each night.
Wanting them to stay their path
and keep away aloneness fright.

How strange the pain from pleasure drawn
that never had a chance to be...
My thoughts caress the hints of you,
that never reached that depth of me.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2003-03-05 11:11 AM

It's painful loving shadow's walk.

Very Beautiful Maureen~
Hugs~

prof.pishnu
Junior Member

since 2003-03-05

Posts 21

2 posted 2003-03-05 11:18 AM

I like this very much, totally blew me away. The wording was perfect. Not to put the poem down but to me its summed up in two lines

My thoughts caress the hints of you,
that never reached that depth of me

knocks me for six each time.Brings a picture of a calm lake and your knelt at the side looking into your soul, and u see the reflection of the one you love trying to reach out, but skimming the water and each time watching the ripples disturb the reflection of your soul. Just a picture, pity wasnt in fewer words, Thank you very much for giving me these thoughts

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

3 posted 2003-03-05 11:24 AM

Thanks Lori..felt like posting today while I try to wake up.

prof. those two lines were the ones I wanted to get across and that is why they are repeated. Thank you for your kind response.
*s
M

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

4 posted 2003-03-05 11:44 AM

this was very well put together young lady.....You wrote what alot of people have lived....well done gal.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2003-03-05 11:49 AM

WynterGal~

'My thoughts caress the hints of you,
that never reached that depth of me.'

Killer line-of-thought, my friend~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

6 posted 2003-03-05 12:02 PM

Thank you Toe, I wish I could say I put a lot of time into it..but this was one of those that just wrote itself *s

Marge, thank you. The line sort of kills me too when I think of what could have been.
hugss
M

[This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (03-05-2003 12:05 PM).]

Phantom Poet
Member

since 2003-03-03

Posts 116
Arizona USA

7 posted 2003-03-05 01:04 PM

written with good thoughts
>>phantom poet<<<

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2003-03-05 01:06 PM

sighing in relation

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

9 posted 2003-03-05 11:06 PM

I can relate to this alot.

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