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How I know I'm loved.
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How I know I'm loved. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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The nails dug just a little deeper to your flesh. And tree upon the back of you Dug splintered fragments To bones of wholesome love. Saliva settled harshly on the skin Which holds me up. And the raving came with lashes; Blood mixed itself With the lining of the tree. And the sweat of blood from sorrowed face Accepted fate with thorned brow. And then my accusations took themselves To the tree and on your back. You rose again and I am free... And this is how I know I’m loved. (editing is probably bad... I've gotta get to school!)  - And so it was that time stood still - (blink, breathe, stand, fight) [This message has been edited by GG (03-05-2003 09:48 AM).] |
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BlueEyes Member
since 2002-08-30
Posts 152TX, USA |
Alyssa - This was absolutley breath-taking.... Why isn't it a book submission? It would have my vote for sure! BlueEyes |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Alyssa, The depth and awareness of this is stunning. You write well beyond your years. I am speechless. Yes, you are loved...by many..... He paid the price, so we don't have to. Well, a thorn here or there... smiling in your knowing understanding. Hugs and much love to you, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Alyssa, this is a beautiful write about our Jesus. This scene always makes me cry in humble adoration of Him. All he had to do was say that He wanted off the cross, but He died willingly for the sins of the world.But, now He lives again Thank you for this poem, and I also think it would be an excellent choice for the book....  Hugs, Ethel |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Blue Eyes, I hope you caught your breath again..  I'm quite honored you'd like it and would vote for it. Though I'm probably not sublimitting any for the book.Pat, Its something that doesn't affect you much if you don't know it ReAlLy and Deeply. I feel blessed to be able to know.. as we all are. Thank you for saying I write beyond my years and stunned you'd be speechless. And yes, a thorn here, or there too *grin* ...many hugs, and love, to you. Ethel, I have this background on my desktop with a picture of Christ, on the cross. Its an all too real picture and inspired this write. Crying, and humbly bowing before His throne is the best place to be. It amazes me so much that he was willing to do it, being GOD, and especially after knowing He had prayed the cup be passed from His lips... wow, praise be to Him! And thank you.Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
You know the truth and that is good....Wonderful write!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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noah j Member
since 2003-03-05
Posts 82on the open road with the wind blowing in my hair |
i really liked this. it seemed to bring the scene to life in a way i don't usually see in my mind. thanks for letting me get a visual of something i haven't thought of since i was a little kid in school. it had great visual imagery. noah the only people for me are the mad ones-mad to live, mad to be saved, desirous of everything at once--jack kerouac |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Alyssa, his is beautiful, sweet friend, this brought tears to my eyes because every time I think of Him and how He lives on it deeply touches my heart as I love Him so much! (sigh) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Alyssa, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Bridegette, you went way back there to find this, thanks for pulling it from the dust. I'm so glad that you find it to be truth, too Thanks also for the wonderful. God bless you. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Noah J, that was my intention, to let it be seen how not many do. Its amazing to think he went through that for us. You know the word excruciating means 'beyond the cross' and that was the word made to describe Christ's death. Powerful isn't it? I hope the thought of this doesn't leave your mind for too long. Stand firm, Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Noah, I think the thought of this should bring tears to more of our eyes, and a smile too. I'm glad you love Him so much as He truly is the King of Kings and even as King and Lord he suffered that. That'd be like me dying for my aunt farm in order to save them. We're so unworthy, but so loved. Thank you for replying, mostly though for understanding. Never forget! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Magnificent. Just magnificent. It's so hard to write on a religious theme without lapsing into images and phrases that were beyond trite before any of us were born. You did it in spades -- get this into print somewhere, will ya? This deserves paper, and a lot of it. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
ratleader, thanks so much. I'm honored hearing that from a poet great as you. I guess thast what I was going for ..a different look at what we all hear of so commonly. Christ is sometimes only seen as innocent and tender (which He is) but we don't see the warrior and suffering. y'know he was called man of sorrows?! and that suffering was unbelievable! Again, thank you Blessings... Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow.... |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
yes, "wow" is right Thanks for the reply! Stand firm, Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Alyssa, One of your best. Yes, innocent and tender, He is, but more, as you state in a reply, a suffering warrior!!! The creativity in this is outstanding. I am glad to see it again. Ed is right. Have you thought of submitting this for print in one of the religious publications? Quite talented, you are. Enjoying your work. Hugs and love, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Alyssa - this is lovely and yes - I think you should start the voting - we will come back to vote - we need on elike this in there - is about unconditional love . . . xxoo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Pat, thanks for the second reply! My only problem with this poem is that I used the word 'and' about fifty times, though I guess I could fix that. I've never really thought much about publishing this (or anything) except maybe for my small youth group's fundraiser of a devotional book. I'm still not too sure its of publishing quality.. and wouldn't know where to start if it was. Thank you though God bless! Hugs and love.Littlewing, thank you for the lovely and.. I'm honored you'd vote.. but still no book submissions for me. Stand firm thanks again.James, thank you, I'm glad you did! Take care!Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
vandana, thank you I'm glad you did!Stand firm... Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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