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If I Should Fall
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If I Should Fall |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
If I should climb up to the cliff and fling myself into the gulf below me, clouds like clabbered cream, if I should taste the wind that streams past eagle arms and shout triumphant from a throat no longer tight, if I should tumble down from endless height and lose my way in cotton mist and never reach the ground, could I then find the sky? Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
hmm.. it would certainly be beautiful.. oh you just described it so wonderfully. But I don't know after so much calling out I'd think the throat would tighten again... too much of anything is painful. I love this. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I think you could definitely find some wind resistance..hehe...seriously one gets the urge to quantify elements to make them have a lasting impression..it gets my vote  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Nancy, that would truly be wonderful if we could just fly like that and fall into the sky, I think every once in a while we must feel as though we are achieving this liftoff! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nancy, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is a very good poem. It made me think and that's a good thing...  "Love makes the world go around" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Interesting write. Reminds what I've heard some achieve through meditation. I liked the sense of freedom some of the imagery presented. Soaring, seems wonderful. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful write...much enjoyed! ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pilgrimage Only if you look around, LOL enjoyed. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Alyssa, thank you. The sky is beautiful, and the clouds draw me. Martin, I love the wind, the feel of it against me. Noah, you are always so kind. I'm glad you liked this one. garysgirl, I'm pleased that you liked it. James, Pat, I'd love to soar, wouldn't you? I could envy birds. Enchantress, thank you so much! Seymour, you make me grin! Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I wish for such freedom..to fall but not hit the ground you know..lovely..*sigh* I wish I could fly right now yannoIf at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
No I think you would crash and burn unless you used these magnificent words to buoy you up. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Ceinwein, I would love to fly, to soar, to live in the wind. Keth, OK, you answered the question. I guess that's why I don't do it. Sigh. Much too practical. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Nan, I love the 'flow' of this. I too felt like I was floating down on the wind. Beautifully done! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
OH, thank you! That's what I wanted you to feel! Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Kinda had a feeling of a floating leaf to it, and I enjoyed it every much indeed. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Pilgrimage--To jump into the sky of "clabbered cream". Oh, how I would love to! I really enjoyed where your poem took me..thank you. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Mysteria, thank you! Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MzPilgrimage~ Tee-Hee ... ya' just never know who's gonna sneak into the voting booth and read ya'~ Hi lady ! You need to e-mail me ...  This is sooooooo purty ... now could we make that jump over the Florida gulf ? *Huglets* to you sweet poetess~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
So soft and pretty. Very well done, made me think to. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nice, Nan... from the "other" variety...  |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Marge! Yes, I would LOVE to dive into the Florida gulf. I still think of that weekend-and think how I'd like a replay. Gentle Spirit, How kind of you. I'm glad you liked it. Nan, it's good to hear from you. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'm not sure of the answer... but I know I love the images. *S* Great write! *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Wow! This gave me a real sense of freedom flying!---I've just decided!--I'm coming back as an eagle! Warm hugs, Earth Angel |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Martie, did I miss you? I must have been replying while you were replying. Thank you for your kind words. Suthern, I don't know the answer either, but I'd love to pose the question for real. Sigh. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
EA-I think it would be like swimming in deep clear water. I'll come back as an eaglet myself! Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Enjoyed the read of this.  |
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lost_star Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 114NY, U.S.A |
Great Poem, very descriptive! |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
White Rose and lost star, thank you both! Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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