Promise Of Spirit (duet with Sunshine)

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Gentle Spirit
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0 posted 2003-03-04 11:03 AM

Promise Of Spirit

The sun settled to welcome the twilight
God painted skies, covering valleys far,
and somewhere, out over the horizon
someone was wishing on a distant star.

Somehow it was this scene recalled to me
a sing-song lilt, some welcome rhapsody
a held back breath, to see a calm in dusk
a gold gone moment, that held me so free

In dimming sky, a majestical view
visions replayed within these hues of red
magic of moment, held in tranquility
the sun resting upon its earthen bed.

Twas then and there, in the dust of this day
I beheld a spirit, in dance of warm
for light backlit her gown in airy play
I held my breath, to not disturb her form

In shimmer of moon, I watched the ballet
a floating on air, soft sighing of breeze
spirit now learning to find her own way
into moments held, and visions she sees.

Did I dare speak thus, "O, apparition?"
in moonlight's glimmer, a sparkle of light
I should have held back, deny intuition,
my spirit, a willow, moving slow this night

I could not but help to join in the dance
amongst twinkling stars, and silver moon
but did I dare to partake of this chance
to dance the heavenly, mystical tune?

Dawn would come before this night is complete,
my willow's spirit, now lost in sun's light
but a promise, to me, day would repeat
hie towards the skies, come this next twilight...

I must have had my momma's will
and Gods Amazing Grace...

I'm a survivor....
(Reba)

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (03-04-2003 11:05 AM).]

Brad Majors

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Georgia

1 posted 2003-03-04 11:05 AM

Beautifully done! I love this duet! Alot of wondeful imagery and lines in this one.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

2 posted 2003-03-04 11:08 AM

Brava!! Beautiful duet Karilea and Donna!!
Awesome write...Two pens so magically blended!
Congratulations you two on a fantastic duet!
~Hugs to you both, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Martie

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3 posted 2003-03-04 11:19 AM

Donna and Karilea....beautiful, beautiful!!!!

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside

4 posted 2003-03-04 11:21 AM

The sun settled to welcome the twilight
God painted skies, covering valleys far,
and somewhere, out over the horizon
someone was wishing on a distant star.

Somehow it was this scene recalled to me
a sing-song lilt, some welcome rhapsody
a held back breath, to see a calm in dusk
a gold gone moment, that held me so free

Lots of love and acceptance of the days that will come what may.

Lovely write you two~

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

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just out of reach

5 posted 2003-03-04 11:24 AM

Oh, how beautiful you two!!

This one is a keeper for sure. I love it!! Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....

-Emily Dickinson

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2003-03-04 11:27 AM

Somehow it was this scene recalled to me
a sing-song lilt, some welcome rhapsody
a held back breath, to see a calm in dusk
a gold gone moment, that held me so free

In dimming sky, a majestical view
visions replayed within these hues of red
magic of moment, held in tranquility
the sun resting upon its earthen bed.

Twas then and there, in the dust of this day
I beheld a spirit, in dance of warm
for light backlit her gown in airy play
I held my breath, to not disturb her form

In shimmer of moon, I watched the ballet
a floating on air, soft sighing of breeze
spirit now learning to find her own way
into moments held, and visions she sees.
=====================================

I could not but help to join in the dance
amongst twinkling stars, and silver moon
but did I dare to partake of this chance
to dance the heavenly, mystical tune?

Dawn would come before this night is complete,
my willow's spirit, now lost in sun's light
but a promise, to me, day would repeat
hie towards the skies, come this next twilight...
=========================

How could this not be divine..the rhymes and imagery leave me giddy..this is sooooo lovely you two...an intoxicating dreamscape...the sun, the moon, the stars... surreal surrender...lovely lovely.

How long have I been dreaming I could make it right ...
If I closed my eyes and tried with all my might
To be the one you need...

J. Browne

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2003-03-04 12:06 PM

(smiles) Yay! Oh Donna and Karilea, this is gorgeous, sweet friends, I too love the form of the dance and believe your spirit just has to dominate the ballroom of your heart, even if there is heartache the grand circle is set before you! (big hugggssssss) This is marvelous, sweet friends, yay, I love it, you make such a great team, I need to get back in the duet department, we all love you both so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Donna and Karilea, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-04-2003 12:56 PM).]

Cpat Hair

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8 posted 2003-03-04 12:39 PM

can I just echoe JM here?

Very nicely done you two... very nicely done.

Phantom Poet
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9 posted 2003-03-04 12:46 PM

very very nice write!!
>>phantom poet<<

Earth Angel
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10 posted 2003-03-04 12:50 PM

I am on bended knee in admiration of this fine piece of poetry! Full of grace and beauty from two of my favorite poetesses! This doubled my pleasure! Truly remarkable! TRULY REMARKABLE!!!

Huge hugs and a mile-wide smile,
Linda

Sunshine

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11 posted 2003-03-04 05:38 PM

It was so good to feel as one in this piece...I give full credit to Donna and her muse, and the beauty of a place once visited, which she then shared with me...

You want to see a poet in motion? Check out all of Gentle Spirit's work...

Thank you dear, for a delightful early morning rendevous...

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29

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Ala bam a

12 posted 2003-03-04 05:39 PM

Yall done good!

Gentle Spirit
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13 posted 2003-03-05 08:36 AM

I wanted to take a quick moment this morning to thank you all and I will return to reply to each in turn a bit later when I can do so when timing is better.

Karilea....the pleasure was mine. Don't let this sunshiney lady fool you folks, she is hard to keep up with!!

Peace to all.

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

14 posted 2003-03-06 11:30 AM

See what I get for being busy? This was sensational you two! When you take two gentle spirits and hand them an exercise in poetry, what could possibly go wrong? Lovely work ladies.

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

15 posted 2003-03-06 11:48 AM

Goodness, Karilea and Donna,
I've got to get with it and check back on here more often. In fact, it's no telling what else I've missed the last few days. You both know how much I love and appreciate each of your poetry......and ya'll gave us a double scoop with this beautiful creation.

I guess all that means I love it.....LOL
Yes, it does, Ladies....

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

Sunshine

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16 posted 2003-03-07 06:42 AM

Thanks again, everyone...

it would be nice to see more collaborations
on the boards...so many talented poets...
so little time!

sea_of_okc
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since 1999-06-15

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Oklahoma City, OK, USA

17 posted 2003-03-07 06:52 AM

Not just any two poets could create such a seamless gem. Very uplifting and beautiful poem... quite a wonderful read to start my day. Hugs to you both!

Nan

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18 posted 2003-03-07 07:18 AM

...Very nice collaboration ladies... I enjoyed...

vandana

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19 posted 2003-03-08 06:58 PM

enjoyed

Gentle Spirit
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20 posted 2003-03-12 01:18 PM

My thanks to all and special hugs to Karilea for making this great, and much fun to do.

vandana

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21 posted 2003-03-13 08:02 PM

loved it

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now

22 posted 2003-03-13 11:05 PM

Gentle Spirit - hey you two, this is awesome. Geez, makes me miss writing a duet with someone, a romantic one, what else. It's been a long time since I've done one...

BC

Gentle Spirit
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23 posted 2003-03-14 10:19 AM

Vandanna and Bill, thank you both so very much. Bill I am sure that you will bless us with a beautiful duet again soon.

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