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Vinter's Heart
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
So this is love? The agonizing wreak tearing reason From mind and leaving heart to beat When she speaks and to stop Should she not. It would seem foolish of me To embrace a loss of logic Knowing I am of weak heart That might not recover from such And then be doomed to lie abed Unable to move forward or back An invalid only cared for Because of what was What then do I want with love? For I am better served in chilled glass. Dry perhaps, but still an easy draught To drain days and nights without Such burn as comes from Drinking straight of her eyes Aged well in oak that has seen fire But survived Still… Oh to be still inside And have this bleed of thought Distilled into Spirit |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ron, I so do love how and what you write. Susan |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So... this.... is love. Well done, Sir. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Nice -- very nice. You captured the feeling and the moment exactly, and went beyond it. Taking instruction on the art of writing here..... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Ron, yes, one drink to remember and another to forget, and make sure you stir with a spoon of sugar! (sigh) This is touching, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...One of your best...straight from a bleeding heart.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Susan, thank you maam... glad you like.. there are many here that write well and many write much better than I, so it noce to hear someone say they like what you offer. Sunshine.. thank you my friend....as to whether this is what love is or not ( chuckling) I am not sure I'm qualified to answer or write about it. Ed... too kind of you to say such. Nothing to learn from me I fear... thanks for the read..and the nice words Noah... thanks kind sir..always appreciate you dropping by. Martie... goes to show what a good imagination can do. ( laughing) Hugs to you my friend. [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (03-04-2003 09:58 AM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Still... Oh to be still inside And have this bleed of thought Distilled into Spirit" Words worthy of repeating! ~ May you be still inside and have all bleed of thought distilled into Spirit! May your spirits soar each morning with the rising of the sun. EA |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
EA... such nice thoughts..thank you. glad you liked that part... I almost left it out entirely..to re-write another ending... but lef it as it seemed the fit needed. thank you again... |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
"What then do I want with love?" strong coffee, poet! you are a treasure! Rf |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
What then do I want with love? For I am better served in chilled glass. Dry perhaps, but still an easy draught To drain days and nights without Such burn as comes from Drinking straight of her eyes Aged well in oak that has seen fire But survived Still… Oh to be still inside And have this bleed of thought Distilled into Spirit =========================== Oh... so this is how it works...ya take a day off from posting...and then come back and intoxicate us with your words?  very cool write and analogies poet sir... (best of all...no worm) LOL How long have I been dreaming I could make it right ... |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
It would seem foolish of me To embrace a loss of logic Knowing I am of weak heart That might not recover from such Hmmmm, yes!! I like your spirit Cpat~ it goes down easy and takes the edge off. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Yes....I'd have to say this sounds like love to me, written as only you can. I agree with Martie, this is indeed one of your best. The depth incredible, heart touching, tear producing, real! Enjoyed Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Touching read Captain, Very... Sunkissed. "I have to hurry past the moon...to Jupiter..." |
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Phantom Poet Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 116Arizona USA |
The words you write sound so right >>phantom poet<< |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Oooh, you're inspiring an idea for a poem... She raised the chilled glass high, an eye within the sun. The light within its iris infused a pale red flame. The cold case of the glass, a candle without wick. She drank away the dregs. It left wax on her lips. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (03-04-2003 01:55 PM).] |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I may be odd - (hush) - But this reminded me of this orchard/winery where I used to live that bottled Grappa with pears in the bottles. It was so neat to see how they did that, all these wine bottles hanging on trees with a baby pear growing in each one. I'm sure so NOT what you were going for with this, but it created a lovely memory of home that I needed today. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'So this is love? The agonizing wreak tearing reason From mind and leaving heart to beat When she speaks and to stop Should she not.' And this also is why...  |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Still… Oh to be still inside And have this bleed of thought Distilled into Spirit Hugssss Lauren~ Take me where the tides start |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
to be still inside...sigh |
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wandering glider Senior Member
since 2001-04-04
Posts 501aloft |
"Vintner" would it be? (I don't think you mean a Swedish Winter) :-) Interesting read nevertheless. w.g. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Unable to move forward or back is no place. Hmmm, without the risk... you know the rest. another beauty, sweet one. Cor |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
fantastic writing but then, you did write it |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well, shucks More good work, m'friend. And that squirrel dude? Sheesh! |
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