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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida 
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I haven't been able to write in such a long time - but something sparked me to dribble this out today. I feel that I must write you out of the crease that threatens to set between my brows I worry about the effect you have on me 'cause - well... we all think we have just cause. This mouth would speak, clumsy; flailing vowels and tripping consonants until you ask me to stop embarrassed by my ungainlyness (is that a word? ... see) Would it though, that my mouth were soft like warm fleece on a cold back I ache to be like those who can assimilate cosmopolitan into whatever they desire It feels like I have known you for years though there is a shared-ness between us that can be seen in a glance or word although I have never spoken to you before now I had to write you out of this crease. I am transitioning, but much too young for wrinkles |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love the ending! I know how you feel...thanks for sharing this emotion |
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rkcraig Member
since 2003-02-27
Posts 202Cincinnati, Ohio, USA |
That's a great piece, I don't understand why more people didn't read it, I enjoyed it. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
interesting piece...and one I enjoyed... you mange to write out well the feeling of being inarticulate when it comes to some things..yet you capture it in a very articulate way... tone and pace of the poem matches the way the thoughts would unfold in a persons mind if thinking them... as I said.. I enjoyed... and hope the writing it out..helped..  now as for wrinkles... don't go knocking wrinkles too badly... (laughing) some of us have our share.... |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
PS - Thank you for reading rk - heh, thank you for your enthusiasm Cpat - Did I mention that was wishfull thinking (about the wrinkles?)  Wouldn't it be nice if they could be written off, eh? Thank you |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(laughing) I would rather keep the wrinkles than lose my hair.. ( oh yeah..too late for that) |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Nicole, this was a very good write of your feelings. About the wrinkles...yeah, wouldn't it be nice if we could just write or wish them away?  Hugs, Ethel |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey you... I'm just not buying this "can't write" stuff--everything I read from you is thoughtful and skillfully phrased and the end result is always touching. More please?  |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Very happy this "Dribbled out" ;smile: Great read |
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