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Open Poetry #25

If you look at me now

ben_pelling
Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 59
Isle of Wight UK.

0 posted 2003-03-02 07:41 PM

If you look at me now,
You may see a smile.
A smile of joy or of happiness,
And that same smile worn upon my face,
May also be mistaken,
Mistaken for emotions which do not even exist.

That same smile may even be covering feelings of sadness or of heartbreak.
A heart shattered of hurt and pain.
From what? The one will only know.
I try to hide low, but still I will lead on to tomorrow.

To take in so much hurt and pain may cause sadness of heartbreak,
To take one step at a time may slow one down,
To slow one down may end a life.
To save that one life, all you may have to do is smile.

If you look at me now you will see a smile, but only a smile of hoping that someone will notice the feelings underneath.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2003-03-02 07:43 PM

Excellent write...I could feel the pain.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

rkcraig
Member

since 2003-02-27

Posts 202
Cincinnati, Ohio, USA

2 posted 2003-03-02 09:03 PM

Know how you feel man.

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

3 posted 2003-03-02 09:07 PM

I feel the pain. Good write

Cold hands means a warm heart

MissKlarmic
Member

since 2003-02-20

Posts 70
Canada,N.S

4 posted 2003-03-02 09:14 PM

Awsome poem, feelings are very true to the heart.

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

5 posted 2003-03-03 06:52 AM

Ben,

Smile though your heart is breaking.
You captured those feelings well.

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

6 posted 2003-03-03 08:49 AM

I also try to hide a lot in a "smile". The people that end up getting close to me are the ones that recognize that smile for exactly what it really is.

Very nice write.

Susan

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