Open Poetry #25 |
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Wasting |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL ![]() |
Another day in this chair of necessity and I feel chained to the sluggish energy of this drowsy town. I miss the warm air and the view of where the water falls over the edge of the world. The lights and the pace will always lure my senses. I'm spending another day in this chair and I feel crowded trying to make my way through a constant country music haze. The energy of this town is sluggish and if I hear one more sad slow strained note pound this rainy grey sky I swear I'll... SARCASM BREEDS A BROKEN HEART, and I have enough cracks. Please stop breaking me! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A nice intense write...James |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...this is powerful! Eric |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Wow! I love this, You let me feel exactly what you did when you wrote this.....and a perfect ending.This one goes straight to my library. Jason |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (big hugggssssss) Oh Jennifer, I know just how you feel, dearest friend, hearing those songs can bring trauma to my mind amidst all the drama we face ever so much and I just want to drift away from the moment! (sad sigh) I send angel hugs your way, dearest friend, I haven't seen you in a while so I hope everything is alright, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jennifer, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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rascalx Senior Member
since 1999-08-25
Posts 590Florence, SC, USA |
Jenn, I can sooooo relate to this... just.... wasting... well done and well written. I especially love how you leave the end hanging... perfect! On a unrelated note (or is it related to your "wasting" concept?... hmmmm) Where are you? I have missed you lots my tempting friend. ![]() - Jeff |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
and what do we do in this city of slate grey skies for a winter cover?...I just set my thoughts onto more pleasant things..nice write ![]() |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Temptress - mannn you just brought me back to Kauai where I left the other half of my heart - know the feeling - know the feeling too well . . . xxoo |
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Moonlight Romeo![]() ![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
There are times where we need to sit in that chair, for just a moment, before we finally break free of it. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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bsquirrel![]()
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Being in a new place is hard, especially without much prior warning. Post something for the book. ![]() |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sigh...yea, me too |
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rkcraig Member
since 2003-02-27
Posts 202Cincinnati, Ohio, USA |
Excellent write. Your city sounds almost as bad as mine. |
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vandana![]()
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed ![]() |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
sad and lonely feel to this, but you are never wasting...when you can express yourself so well. Nice to read you again hugssssss M |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You are not wasting a day when you sit in the right chair!--and you did sit down in the right chair when you wrote this compelling piece of writing! You really pulled the reader in and shared your very personal experience. Warm hugs, EA |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
You'll???? Hmmm, missing the water. No cure for that but moving back to the water. I know, I suffer from the same. Now I can't move back, it's too expensive. Someday, I will, though. Hope you are well, dear one! Cor |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
I Agree! Powerful! You're a wonderful talent! |
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Ladies_Rogue New Member
since 2003-03-06
Posts 7Mississippi |
his is a cool write I know how you feel grew up in the country Nothing and more Nothing Henry |
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Cpat Hair![]()
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
must have missed this first time... very nicely done.. some days are like that..ans so are some thoughts.. |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I guess I missed this one, too, first time around...glad I didn't this time, though. Hugs, Ethel |
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