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Stab Me |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought 
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Try me, come on Stab my back and see I’m made of blood and bone I may even gasp When the blade melts Through my flesh. …Not that I have feelings. ‘Cause I just fight To win the battle And I ache to see you soar. I just cry For strength in sorrow, Praying mercy will be yours. But it’s ok, To stab my back Or leave me to defend myself. My swords streak of silver Will be there, When you reach danger. And I’ll fight… I’ll win the battle. I’ll help to your feet. My body painted By my blood, Will never face retreat. - And so it was that time stood still - (blink, breathe, stand, fight) [This message has been edited by GG (03-02-2003 10:47 AM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Whoa!!!!!!! This is awesome. I just loved it a lot. The imagery is awesome. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
GG Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Alyssa, What can I say? I simply love your fighting spirit and the poetic power in this piece. Yes, awesome! Hugs and love, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
loner, thanks for the whoa! I'm glad you liked you. a gidday to you. Sey sir, glad you enjoyed. And thank you for the well done, much appreciated Pat, you've said alot thank you for the awesome and.. I think I write to remind myself I'm fighting. And, I guess I do. hugs and love.now about the whole thing. Its written pretty much in regards to someone who's 'suppose' to be helping, but is instead stealing from me and lying to me. But someone I'm not necessarily in the position to show 'tough love' to. So instead I show them what it means to fight, I guess, and pick them up when they fall. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
fight on, fight on! never give up! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
The power is felt .... he won't dare! Beautifully written. Margherita |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
that was written with such strenth that it gave even ME a momentary will. Excellent job! :-) |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 Yay!!! You go girl!!! (big hugggssssss) You truly are a warrior and if that one is truly that strong, mercy can be felt there for you, I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Alyssa, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Alyssa this was amazing, wished I'd written this.. |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
And my hero is Caeser, Whom never lost, never retreated.I love this. Jason |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Dixie, I'll fight! You wanna help? thanks much!Margherita, I wish ..she would dare. But no matter how much power I'm afraid she still will. Thank you for the beautiful KristieSue, thank you glad you found strength here and... we all need a will, come on, fight!Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Noah, thank ya! I'm honored to be called a warrior, and yes, there is much mercy shown.. always has been, but things just aren't working. Guess it takes more than my realization, but hers too! Aenimal, I think someone saying they wish they wrote it is about the best compliment you can get, especially from such a great writer. Thank you very much!! Jason, My Hero never lost or retreated either, and I fight for Him. But the word battle and fight still mean blood scars and stabs. So, here I stand! Thanks much! honored you love it.Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
GG - courage and faith in yourself always in the face of adversity - been there many times - good for you xxoo |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Allysa, You are a very gifted writer, with much talent and ability to put your feelings down. Very, very good. ;loveya: Hugs, Ethel |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
littlewing, I have faith that what Someone else is true.. apart from that the courage and faith in myself is nothing.. well, apart from that I am nothing. So, thats where I get my power from. Thanks muchly! Ethel, thank you so much. I only write in order to get my feelings down, 'cause I'd go crazy if they stayed inside my head without me knowing what they were! They don't all pour so smooth though, sometimes it really is indescribable. But I am honored you'd find me gifted and with talent.. again, thank you hugs to you.Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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