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Alicethruglass
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since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

0 posted 2002-02-25 04:29 AM

Postscript

A simple glance, truths yet untold
fingertip kisses at arms length in hold
sound of anger, calming of fright
empty of rhymes, just a ghost in the night
iced in a silence, iridescent of pure
a love letter left twixt crack in the door.

"I need you my love, still the pain from within"
feathered in tear stains, "How long it has been.
Each season's forever, till the first when we met
a walk by the ocean, could you never forget
the familiar of touching, heavens that spun
senses that flooded, momenting to one.

You're the spirit of loving, the gift of a prayer
that lingers whenever these eyes see you there
in my mind, holding captive, by the essence of sweet.
Let me hold you once more, let me dance you complete.
There is spring in the coming, a newness to rise.
Let me smile you again, be your morning surprise.

I withhold all I am, gift these words from my heart.
P.S. I'll be waiting, my love to impart."

~PWS~

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-02-25 08:33 AM

(sigh) Oh my gosh, this is sooooooo beautifully crafted, sweet friend, may this love letter forever touch the heart of your love! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is outstanding! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Canuckster
Member

since 2002-01-09

Posts 285
New Mexico, USA

2 posted 2002-02-25 08:40 AM

Alice,

Very good piece of rhyme and meter which flows naturally and doesn't feel awkward or forced.

You are very gifted!

never try to teach a pig to sing
it wastes your time AND annoys the pig

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

3 posted 2002-02-25 09:41 AM

Very beautiful words...nicely done..

~Victoria~

"Mistakes are the portals of discovery."
-- James Joyce

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

4 posted 2002-02-25 10:36 PM

How beautifully this flowed, both the thoughts and the rhythm. It brought a poignant smile to my face, with a memory it made me think of.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Alicethruglass
Member

since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

5 posted 2002-02-25 11:16 PM

Thank you, Noah, Canuckster, Victoria and Tracey. I appreciate the kind words. *s

~A~

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2002-02-26 01:12 PM

I loved the flow of this. . . just moves effortlessly. . .

well done. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Alicethruglass
Member

since 2001-06-19

Posts 368

7 posted 2002-03-03 08:53 AM

Sven, thank you for your kind words *s

~A~

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