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Jamie
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Blue Heaven

0 posted 2002-02-14 10:06 PM

     I hope I am your dream.

These words, written and silently read,
      fastened themselves to my mind
and refused to leave my tongue -
forcing me to linger over their bitter taste.

      You  hope.
                       I dream.

Your hope,  resting in my
dreams perverts reality.
     Why is it dreams are allowed
to remain dreams even after they
have been crumbled?
Hope is still hope, even when
     it is lost.
A home in ruins is no longer
even as much as a house; it
    is only a rubbish heap,
   and yet
destroy a dream and you have
    a dream unrealized -
When you let a dream go,
does it not take with  it
       a piece of your heart?

     I hope I am your dream.

You were all my dreams, and
when you left they followed
    after you
There was little left of me
except the hope you
   would return.
Years followed years, like
   hesitant footsteps in the dark
        on uncertain ground.
Sometimes the moon
is bright enough to show the way
shining it's soft green light along
       unfamiliar paths that lead
       to a place where fresh
dreams can take the place
    of aging  memories.

    I hope I am your dream.

Listen,
     you might hear yesterday
sneaking up on today -
disguised as forgiveness
and whispering  profound regrets.
     Deception sees no stranger -
deceit offers a hand at every turn.
Please,
Be sure of the hand that guides  you
before hoping to
       rejoin  abandoned dreams.
Maybe it is better to simply wait
     until new ones come our way
so as to not let them pass untried.

   I hope I am your dream.

I wonder if you
considered the meaning  of those words
before you wrote them out,
and what they meant
    for me.
A dream that never comes true
is its own kind of hell-
and would be more nightmare
than dream.
Sleep would come easily
if I only knew which awaited
the closing of my eyes.

    I dream I am your hope.

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-02-14 10:20 PM

Oh Jamie! This is not a poem, it's a blood-let. I adore the twist of ending, and it is indeed exquisite. Complex questions with wondered answers in poetry! Awe.

Tracey
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where insanity meets breeding

2 posted 2002-02-14 10:54 PM

Wow, I’ve read this twice now. Take a chance on a dream I say. For when a dream comes true, it is the most beautiful thing imaginable. And if you don’t take the chance, you’ll always wonder, what if.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

3 posted 2002-02-14 11:04 PM

Jamie, I echo Tracey's thoughts exactly. I love this...one of your best. I especially appreciate the repetition of the title throughout. Much enjoyed tonight.
~Valentine Hugs, Nancy~

~Love transcends time and space~

Dark Angel
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4 posted 2002-02-14 11:05 PM

Jamie, I especially loved the last verse..

I wonder if you
considered the meaning  of those words
before you wrote them out,
and what they meant
    for me.
A dream that never comes true
is its own kind of hell-
and would be more nightmare
than dream.
Sleep would come easily
if I only knew which awaited
the closing of my eyes.

and I loved the twist in the last line..

I dream I am your hope.

sigh Jamie, a beautiful outpouring so delicately penned.

Maree

Mistletoe Angel

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5 posted 2002-02-14 11:07 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Jamie, always hold your dreams close to your heart, for dreams are the most beautiful things of all! (sigh) Sooooo heartaching but wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! HAPPY VALENTINES DAY!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jamie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (02-14-2002 11:07 PM).]

Poet deVine

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6 posted 2002-02-14 11:16 PM

I am at a loss for words. This is magnificent. You are writing from the deepest parts of your heart and it's wonderful.

Jamie
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Blue Heaven

7 posted 2002-02-14 11:27 PM

Thanks muchly-- you guys are the greatest.

Those words were written on the back of something I got for Valentines Day--

I spent a great part of the day pondering it.
This was the result.

Thanks again

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

RosePetal

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8 posted 2002-02-14 11:55 PM

this is exquisite writing sir! Happy Valentines Day to you

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now

9 posted 2002-02-15 12:03 PM

Jamie - excellent writing. I enjoyed reading this...

BC

Mysteria

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10 posted 2002-02-15 12:07 PM

Listen,
     you might hear yesterday
sneaking up on today -
disguised as forgiveness
and whispering  profound regrets.

and to dream you are their hope is the makings of a dream come true.  OMG I loved this Jamie, and into the "keeper kennel" you go!  I thank you for this, it was fantastic!

The older I grow, the less important the comma becomes.
Let the reader catch their own breath."
~Elizabeth Clarkson Zwart~

Jamie
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Blue Heaven

11 posted 2002-02-15 11:48 AM

Glad you liked it. To have someone be the dream IN your life instead OF your life is a difference of more than just two letters.
Thanks for reading.

J

Martie

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California

12 posted 2002-02-15 09:20 PM

Jamie...You went deep for the pondering in this one...and pulled out some wisdom words. Well done!

J. K. Mitchell
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GA

13 posted 2002-02-15 09:32 PM

I'm speechless.

"The only love there is, is the love we make."--Prince

Midnitesun

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Gaia

14 posted 2002-02-16 02:45 AM

"A dream that never comes true
is its own kind of hell-
and would be more nightmare
than dream.
Sleep would come easily
if I only knew which awaited
the closing of my eyes."
Unbelievable. You have really rung a truth bell here. Thanks for sharing this with the rest of us dreamers Jamie!

catalinamoon

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The Shores of Alone

15 posted 2002-02-17 09:32 AM

Jamie, there were so many parts I wanted to copy, lets just say every line felt special.
Sandra

Jamie
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Blue Heaven

16 posted 2002-02-17 11:46 PM

Again, Thanks very much.

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Dark Angel
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17 posted 2002-02-18 09:45 PM

Jamie I was taking a stroll along PIP Street and I found you standing there....

I read you again
I am so glad I did because for some reason this poem has touched me so much more than the first and this time brought tears to my eyes.

Every line took my breath away.

hugs and love m'friend

Maree

butterflykiss989
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18 posted 2002-02-19 01:04 AM

Wow powerful words you write... it brought tears to my eyes...

talon8
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19 posted 2002-02-19 01:22 PM

Jamie, This was a truly a pleasure to read.

Jamie
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Blue Heaven

20 posted 2002-02-21 01:04 PM

Thanks to all, I appreciate each of you for taking the time to read and reply.

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

CocoBaci
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21 posted 2002-02-24 03:08 AM

Jamie, this touches my heart in more ways that I can say and gosh I'm glad b4 I go2sleep2nite that I caught this exquisite write that you've shared with us here...
HugsNsmiles2uPoetFriend
*~coco~*

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

22 posted 2002-02-24 03:22 AM

Jamie-
Wow...this is incredible writing!
Extremely well penned!
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Kethry
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Victoria Australia

23 posted 2002-02-24 04:15 AM

Jamie,
this is like a river with all its twists and turns but still rushing to its final destination. I agree it's a blood let.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

24 posted 2002-02-24 04:33 AM

Interesting...James

Severn
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25 posted 2002-02-24 05:21 AM

Here I am dear...late as usual...my apologies..

I think you've written out how you felt about this remarkably. Your writing has grown hon, it really has.

Stay strong ok?

Hugs,

K

peaches73533
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26 posted 2002-02-24 09:36 AM

Jamie,
Hold onto your dreams for they carry us so far.Complex but well written write.
Peaches

Sunshine

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27 posted 2002-02-24 09:40 AM

The blend of the two thought/conversations, when only heard by one, questioning...what a write, Jamie...

thank you for sharing this...as our Serene one said, this was a letting...a telling...

dyslexia, you know...

PearlsB4Swine
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where the heart finds me

28 posted 2002-02-24 11:48 AM

This was a very powerfully written piece Jamie, a lot of it really hit home with me. Thanks!

Zinsser
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Calif.

29 posted 2002-02-24 01:23 PM

This is soooo very good..
Thanks

Severn
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30 posted 2002-02-24 08:13 PM

Jamie, I just had to revisit this...tell you how much I love it, and love your writing.

Hugs, K

[This message has been edited by Severn (02-24-2002 08:18 PM).]

Jamie
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Blue Heaven

31 posted 2002-02-24 11:48 PM

Thanks again everyone.

and another warm wish for the Birthday Girl.
((((K))))

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

esclandre
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Northern California

32 posted 2002-02-25 02:00 AM

When you let a dream go,
does it not take with it
a piece of your heart?

sums the entirety up in a tidy phrase - so right that it does, and it's a piece that can never be reclaimed. *sigh* this was indeed a heart-wrenching twist of wonder, doubt, and perhaps half-buried hopes. wowed here.

esclandre

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