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Velveteen
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Velveteen |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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In silence of the velveteen upon the stealth of in between. A toy in tatters on the shelf begriming dust with tears of self… very nearly hugged to death seams asunder, love’s last breath and stuffing of a heart’s sweet dream The spill of love – the rabbit’s scream A quickening of alchemy o-see-what-love-can-do-to-me… I pray you’ve art of stitchery, and suture the remains of me. And even bunnies still in plush have longing for the need of touch. Forgotten toy upon the shelf— in regret of loss of self, the need for one transforming tear, simplicity of holding near… With no imagine of enough… in flutter of a life within to feel, to know the birth of sin Aspersion, all be cast aside and know ye now I daily die. But leave me to my dusty shelf— at least I know the house of self familiarity therein— I could not bear begin again so leave me to my chosen hell. Build me walls, of blocked cubed halls And poems vague---disguised of spell, clipped of wings, an angel falls a call of flesh's unruly dwell. No longer do I wish to feel— Do not love me, make me real… Never will I feel, AMEND The fool has journey’d once again… A velveteen of hungry heart… and every word recalled--surreal. But touch me not— I’ll stay forgot— upon my shelf, remain unreal. (repost from open 11, with hugs for m'friend!) |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Mind if I move those skates and have a seat there with ya? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Can't get much better than that.  |
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Wanda Member
since 2001-10-23
Posts 461 |
Serenity; This is fantastic. Bravo!! Beautiful writing. Wanda |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Stand up Serenity....CLAP CLAP CLAP.... STANDING OVATION. Absolutely wonderful work. Rhyme, rhythm, flow. Beautiful lines. Totally wonderful. floria Floria |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Incredible and I am so glad that you reposted this, I would hate to miss something that I can tuck into my treasure box to read over and over again. Well done serene one. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ahhh yes, memories of one of my favourite books, The Velveteen Rabbit, which is used now as a backrest for my tattered teddy bear. To be real, or not to be? Chris  Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wondering how I might have missed this one. . . flowing and very sound in rhythm. . . I like it. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Pretty cool, to retell a story in such a different way. Yet still the message rings true. You did this so well. I like it lots. Sandra |
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