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Martie

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0 posted 2002-02-26 11:28 AM

The Mirror in the Closet

This day is full of shadows,
they slant across his lap
darkening the crease and fold,
lingering on his ankle,
turning its golden, brown.

His surface slants, then bends
and slithers into the corner
where he has hidden his dense feeling,
waiting as it always does
for evening,

evening, when all things are equal
and darkness opens the closet.

Then, he pulls out a box of memory,
a box
without the grace to collect dust.

It is then that he weeps
into the questions
that form and reform his days now,
and he takes them up one by one
and examines their black and white stillness
looking for an answer,
one that will ease him away from the past
and take him, blissfully
into his last years.

What he doesn’t see
is the mirror behind him,
where the answer waits.
----
3-14-01

Nightshade

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just out of reach

1 posted 2002-02-26 11:31 AM

Oh Martie!! This gave me chills. You never cease to amaze me dear lady. Library bound it is. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Cpat Hair

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2 posted 2002-02-26 11:37 AM

Bravo!! Again your style and talent delivers the "punch" that hits the reader where it counts. Always a pleasure to read your works..and this is certainly one I will read again and again...

catalinamoon

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The Shores of Alone

3 posted 2002-02-26 01:33 PM

Wonderful, Martie. And it gave me chills, too. Very intense and well done.
Sandra

jwesley
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4 posted 2002-02-26 01:39 PM

So true, and very well written...

jwesley

Mistletoe Angel

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5 posted 2002-02-26 01:46 PM

(smiles) Oh my gosh, this is sooooooo hauntingly beautiful, sweet friend, my heart goes out to him and I hope he will find the answer and embrace each new day with a mirrored smile and follow his dreams! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet freind, this is breathtaking! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2002-02-26 01:52 PM

Martie,
You poem stepped on my toe but it was a delightful pain.

Sunshine

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7 posted 2002-02-26 01:54 PM

Oh but I see her there, waiting for him...this is priceless, as are you! Hugs for this...my Keeper stock is growing...

Mysteria

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8 posted 2002-02-26 02:50 PM

Me too! (in the mirror)... I wished he would have turned around

Martie, spectacular!

~* Imagination is more important than knowledge *~

Einstein

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9 posted 2002-02-26 03:06 PM

What he doesn’t see
is the mirror behind him,
where the answer waits.

I wish he had turned around too!
Excellent, Excellent Martie!

hugs

Maree

Madame Chipmunk
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10 posted 2002-02-26 03:31 PM

I hate to say, "me too", but this gave me the chills also, Martie....It is an outstanding poem written as only you could write such a poem. I think you should write a sequel to it...with him turning around and seeing what is in the mirror!

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

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11 posted 2002-02-26 03:38 PM

Martie, I echo Lyra's response to this wonderful piece! Yes please a sequel...have him turn around and see her just for a moment. Oh my, I still have chills! Into my library this one goes!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Martie

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12 posted 2002-02-26 04:51 PM

Isn't it interesting, the way a poem is perceived in different ways. My intention was that the reflection in the morror was of himself..but for it to be "her" puts a whole new slant on it. Thanks for reading!

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