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Ruffled Feathers |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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I am guilty of reading into things that are missing only because I wish to see more clearly, perhaps to understand. At times I find your behavior strange, at the same time I question my own, and I wonder what it is that draws me to you. I've not a single answer as there are several, so I'm taking the fifth on that. I feel like a child who suffers from separation anxiety I often wish I could line up all my ducks in a row and keep my feathers from being ruffled time and again I long for just a day that I might be mistaken for a swan and perhaps you might come stand at the edge of the lake and see me for who I am. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The first lines made me smile in recognition of myself, and then this: "I often wish I could line up all my ducks in a row and keep my feathers from being ruffled time and again" made me laugh out loud at the mirror image of me in you! smiling, clever lines there! Enjoyed muchly, Blues! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hi Serenity~ Thank you for leaving such a fun reply! How does the saying go, 'if you can't beat em join em' I've got this mental image of the mother duck getting all worked up! (sad to say she looks like me)  It's nice to hear from you, and thank you for laughing with me. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (02-18-2002 02:41 PM).] |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
I'm glad I didn't miss this. I'm agreeing with Serenity, it makes me smile. I think they call it the attraction of opposites, of which I am guilty also. It usually has more to do with the swan than the thing that ruffled its feathers. The thing I like about this medium is that the swan may stay in its lake and still communicate. This is very good. [This message has been edited by mirror man (02-18-2002 03:15 PM).] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i really enjoyed this ..it all makes sense to me ha.. ~Vic |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Mirror man~ Thank you very much for such a nice reply, yes you're right about it having to do with the swan as opposed to the ruffler. Sometimes we get ourselves all shook up for no reason at all. Thanks again. Victoria~ I'm glad you made some sense out of this. It wasn't my intention to imply that I am some kind of swan! Although I like the thought of it. Thanks and *huggers* [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (02-18-2002 03:36 PM).] |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
My sentiments exactly Blues, lovely expression. floria Floria |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
AHH yes, this was great! WELLDONE! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) These are such beautifully sentimental thoughts, sweet friend, may He forever smoothen your wings and feathers of your heart and have you flying happily always! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - I do hope whomever this is that they read it. Very open thoughts... BC |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, Not only is it good...it gets a bump!  |
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Bella New Member
since 2002-02-15
Posts 6Ohio |
I absolutely love the rhythm of this one- and the use of metaphors...I really related to this piece. above everything else, love one another... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BluesSerenade~ 'I long for just a day that I might be mistaken for a swan and perhaps you might come stand at the edge of the lake and see me for who I am.' Oh ... I like this soooooo much~ Relating here~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
and perhaps you might come stand at the edge of the lake and see me for who I am. This is excellent! *S* I was chuckling at lining up your ducks without your feathers being ruffled... but the smiles turned wistful at the end... for don't we all wish to be seen as we really are... and loved anyway? *S* |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
It likes me... thanks for the read..  K |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
At times I find your behavior strange, at the same time I question my own, and I wonder what it is that draws me to you. I've not a single answer as there are several, so I'm taking the fifth on that. here in lies an answer or two.... very nicely done and a clever use of image... I enjoyed |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
It would be nice to always be understood, thats how I feel reading this. I like the swan idea too, though. Sandra |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Blue - I enjoyed this very candid and introspective write. Some advice though, if you want to avoid getting your feathers ruffled you should shave them all off. Problem solved.  Nice writing.Dave |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
In the words of that immortal cat, Garfield "I resemble those remarks" Truthfully, Lori....this is an exquisite piece about a universal feeling...that is why so many of us can see ourselves in this poem.   You are truly the swan! copyright2002 Lyra Nesius "poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks [This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (02-21-2002 08:22 PM).] |
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