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SEA
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with you

0 posted 2002-04-01 12:02 PM





It was like the new day dawning
in a sad recognize
I saw past the image
past the beautiful disguise

The fog gently lifted
I was given clear view
and I could no longer see the same
when looking at you

It was only about friendship
to keep lonely at bay
I never expected you
in any other way

Damn you for not understanding
it was so unconditional
I never asked for anything
nothing additional…..

And still you keep yourself elusive
…..always just out of reach
all the while etching your footsteps
forever on my beach……


~SEA~



© Copyright 2002 S.E. A - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2002-04-01 12:05 PM


Sea...this is beautifully written...so perfectly summed up in the last line.
BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2002-04-01 12:10 PM


This is stunning SEA,
your writing is beautiful
but I am more in awe of
your message and how you go
about getting it across!

Really nice, very much so!!


ThisDiamond
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3 posted 2002-04-01 12:10 PM


Another pearl...a wonderful write strong and powerful. ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2002-04-01 12:23 PM


The fog gently lifted
I was given clear view
and I could no longer see the same
when looking at you

Isn't it funny how our vision gets foggy when we don't want to see certain things in our friends....
A beautiful and sensitive poem, Sue...
~hugs from a friend~

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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5 posted 2002-04-01 12:26 PM


etching your footsteps
forever on my beach

(((Sea))) my goodness this poem is sweet...
You captured this reader in the intensity of your expression penned here and I compliment you on yet 'another' terrific write...
HugsNsmiles2uDearPoetFriend
*~coco~*

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6 posted 2002-04-01 12:42 PM


My walk is selfish
but my walk is true
upon the sands
I left with you

I will not try to explain
the complexities of sun and rain

Nothing
is unconditional

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2002-04-01 07:20 AM


everything is unconditional
it is a matter of us and our
conditions..we accept or we

let things go..

enjoyed your write here SEA

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8 posted 2002-04-01 08:10 AM




(big hugggssssssss) This is soooooo beautifully sad, sweet friend, it too always saddens me to see the way we look at people change and how it makes us feel vague! (kiss on cheek) This is very wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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9 posted 2002-04-01 08:29 AM


SEA,
I loved the vision of discovery...even if it's painful.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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10 posted 2002-04-01 11:00 AM


Susan,

this was a very powerfully and emotionally
written poem, just beautiful even in
its pain and sadness. you have an incredible
gift my friend...i sit in awe of YOU!
one of your best dear, truly wonderful!

take care.
amy

"you can't stop
the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do"

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11 posted 2002-04-01 11:12 AM



Sheesh, SEA, I can hear the fog horns in this one, and they sure sound lonely...

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12 posted 2002-04-01 12:20 PM



And still you keep yourself elusive
…..always just out of reach
all the while etching your footsteps
forever on my beach……
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Susan, this is an incredible write!
One of your best...another treasure from your pen.  This one aches with loneliness.
Well done.  Hugs.

Dee
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13 posted 2002-04-01 04:36 PM


So touching and beautiful, Sue. I love the way you write from the heart.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life.     a brand

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14 posted 2002-04-01 04:40 PM


bravo.... touching and heart felt write...
added to by the image chosen to accompany it.
my compliments

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15 posted 2002-04-02 01:54 AM


Friends can do that, can't they, Susan.  Yes, there's always so much unexpected in a friendship.  You've spoken about this well, my friend.  (((hugs)))

me

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16 posted 2002-04-02 06:30 AM


Beautiful!!!!!

thread to my library Sea

((hugs))
Charisma

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17 posted 2002-04-02 12:59 PM


Footprints of the heart that leave oh so much more.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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18 posted 2002-04-02 01:24 PM


Susan, this is hauntingly beautiful.  I loved the write and hurt with you while reading.  I can say no more at this point.

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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19 posted 2002-04-02 08:00 PM


Susan,
Compelling write that huants me intensely. Damn. lc

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20 posted 2002-04-05 11:25 PM


Susan, this made my heart sink.
SEA
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21 posted 2002-04-05 11:32 PM


thank you all for your warm, kind replies thank you very much
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