Open Poetry #19 |
A Velvet Glove |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
A Velvet Glove There’s a rhythm to my rhyme A simple humble line in time Like rolling waves that pave unsung A transcendental hand and tongue As pressure molds the finest surf Just so I’d rhyme a smoother turf And soften graphic filigree The epitaph of disagree There is a dust I would erase To make a garden in its place A minuscule but point of clear Oasis for the heart and ear What treasure could I leave behind? To soothe the aching of our kind Some words above the flaccid dust That flies above the acid crust. A pure white dove of rhyming love A net of warmth a velvet glove [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (03-30-2002 11:46 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This took me on a trip in time and scurried I to keep the rhyme then wound it down to softened note and geez I am so glad you wrote... Man...you really got the tongue moving on this one...Bravo! |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thank you for sharing such a wonderful poem, I really enjoyed the read |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, Thank you for the bravo. Marshalzu, You welcome and thank you for the read. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There's a rhythm to my rhyme A simple humble line in time Like rolling waves that pave unsung A transcendental hand and tongue And soften graphic filigree The epitaph of disagree There is a dust I would erase To make a garden in its place A minuscule but point of clear Oasis for the heart and ear ==================================== Some words above the flaccid dust That flies above the acid crust. A pure white dove of rhyming love A net of warmth a velvet glove ==================================== I have said it before and will say many times again ... YOU ARE SO COOL!! You rock Sy-babers...this ones melodics are proof of your rhyme & cadence mastery... "And soften graphic filigree The epitaph of disagree could that line be any cooler? me thinks not!! Oasis for the heart and ear Ya got that right!! Youre the sugar in me morning tea me Stinkylove. *WW* how about how good it feels to finally forgive you |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Smoooooothie..... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Ah, this is wonderful "A pure white dove of rhyming love A net of warmth a velvet glove" What more could a poet desire? Sandra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, We'll have tea at three on the shores of our sea. Just you and randy and me. Love Ya Nan, Yes you are. Sandra, thank you. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
There's Sy...kissing' all the gals again. So what's new.....? |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah Sy this is so smooth and subtle.......nicely done my friend! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, So what's new? I'm waiting for you. Did you get your ticket yet. Call me or I'll call you Thanks for the read. Ethome, Thanks for the nicely. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
wonderfully rolling waves of rhyme that create a need for pondering I do think you want 'soothe' rather than 'sooth' forsooth my good man ;o} Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
from the velveteen mind spoken with a silken pen the caress of your words is filled with attentive care of language, heart-song, and great ability. tSR |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
VAS, Soothe it is, thank you sweet. ShadowRider, flattery will get you everywhere. LOL Thanks |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
A pure white dove of rhyming love A net of warmth a velvet glove I love this imagery, Sy... A gorgeous poem! ~hugs~ copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Voiceless Senior Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 686Under the stars upon the wind |
I love it, it is so beautiful. Your words flow so well it is like falling into a web of silk. Thank you very much! Freedom is not Free (Korean War memorial) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lyra, Did you start collecting humor yet? From what I said in ShadowRiders poem. Voiceless, Beautiful reply, thank you. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Sy You really are an amazing poet. Your rhythm is perfect, seems effortless. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your wonderful words always croon across these pages like a doves cry with true beauty! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan, A beautiful reply, thank you. And thank you my friend Noah. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour my dearest friend this is awesome, truly exceptional writing. The words alone would have made this arresting reading, when it’s combined with your amazing skill or form it’s utterly utterly perfect. YOU know I adore your writing, simply adore it, you have the skill to write in a whole range of styles across the board. I sometimes wonder why I’m not insanely jealous of you darling heart, I suppose it’s because I know I’ll never be this good. Oh and maybe because I adore you too my dearest friend, you are simply the best. You do know I really LOVE this don’t you? I thought you would pick up the subtle and delicate nuances of my rapture. That too is one of the reasons I adore you, you always know when to laugh Fabulous writing darling heart utterly utterly fabulous Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
SY~ Ive read this 2 times now, looking to pick a favorite line, but I can't cause Id have to "" the whole poem....very lovely... Lauren~ ~Greeneyes~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marsha, Fabulous writing darling heart utterly utterly fabulous. Lauren, To read it twice is beyond my expectations. I can only thank you twice. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Loved the rhythm Sy..makes me feel like dancing ha..hugss ~Victoria
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Victoria, Thank you love. |
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